Hi Aster,
one thing that stands out to me when i look at it is "you" are out of focus a bit but no action is implied. Kinda' anti-climatic, as if seconds later you leaped from your chair in response to something happening out of frame... As Misha says it doesn't seem to stand on it's own but works great as a flimstrip. Great film noir lighting drawing the eye down the empty hallway. I love B/W photos.
Hope to see more.