Well, it's your image. I kinda like the orange light. However it is not natural to have it like that. So you may want to extend it towards the source so that it becomes more logical. Perhaps dim it a little. Note: the source is opposite to the shadow. That may be what's bothering you. It doesn't seem logical to have that shadow without the light source extending to the right. However, it is a lighting technique used in surreal films, like Dick Tracy for example. The lighting is illogical, but it's a feast for the eye. The selective focus is something that is a bit harder to handle in a still as opposed to cinema. This scene reminds me of a theatrical scene with a theatrical lighting. If you don't work in the field, you have very good powers of observation. But lets be clear, Light painting essentially means: 1. that the lighting is quite uneven. 2. (In most cases) What is in the light is in focus. If you do play with the focus, I'd say go easy and trust your visual instinct. That's just an amazing render. I'll be visiting your galery often. Thanks, Q

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