Tanks for reading, and I'm happy that you were honest in your critiques. Most of my friends at school just read it and said "Oh, that's so amazing!" and nothing more, which has always been a pet peeve of mine.

In regards to the spelling errors, the final copy I sent to the judges for the workshop was typo-free and all polished, but when I went to look for the disk I had it saved on, I couldn't find it, and the only copy I had on my hard drive was the Notpad document I'd first typed it in before converting it to WordPerfect. I had forgotten it wasn't editted for spelling like the final copy. (Come to think of it, some of the wording might have been changed as well.) Ah, well. It was a learning experience.

In regards to Schaen (that's the angel's name :) and the portrayal of his character: I know I didn't do the greatest job of pulling it off. Part of the reason I chose to write this story at the time, was because Schaen is a character in a fantasy story I'm writing that actually centers around his mother. (Side not to anyone who's visited my galleries: the Poser figure I created named Aeva, who appears in much of my work is actually and 3D version of his mother) Because Schaen is mute, I wasn't sure how I was going to bring his emotions to light. That story is in third person, but I thought this one was better done from his point of view.

A major problem with giving Schaen his personality is who's his parents are and how they've rubbed off on him over the years. His mother grew up on the streets and acts as though she did, and his father is a god and is very old-fashioned. It's a hard mix to pin down. I'm still working on it though.

Thanks for the reviews. I guess I've learned a few things, not least of all being to type as fast as I think. The typos will be less then. ^^;;