Hahaha, Shoshanna you made me laugh. I was listening to that guys voice while I wrote my blurb. Very funny. He could make taking a crap sound like a dramatic event. Thank you for your input. I did not realise I was using simple vocab. Thanks a lot. I will have to see if I do that by habit. Chuck, thanks for the input. I personally don't mind if you give critiques without submitting your work. I use this forum selfishly to gain any advice and input I can. You are right, I have strong beginnings and fizz out on the promise. It's a weakness I'm trying to work on. Thank you for your honesty.