As I have said earlier, of all the things that are NOT my fortin writing, poetry ranks high...grin. It gets worse when confronted with a haiku. So, any comments from me should be taken as those from a common reader. I think I understand the thought you are trying to set to words. I think it's a good comparison. Analagy. Hmmm. Not the right words. It's not personification. Can't remember the word I'm looking for. Well, you get my drift. It seems nicely descriptive. Not overly so but just about right. Sometimes, I think people can overdo adjectives...grin. I'll list a few places I "stumbled": "But can nature's fury Match the turmoil in my heart?" It's probably me, but I read it over a few times and this part seemed to interupt the tempo set in the first verse and continued in the third verse. And, with a sheepish grin, I shall mention that the few times I read the part, "...When I feel like crawling; Take one more step, When I feel like faltering", the little voice inside me that cries for rhyming verse kept inserting "falling" for faltering. But I slapped him about a bit and though he protested, I satisfied him by mentioning it here. Nice work. I'm sure others can make comments better suited to what you are probably seeking.