Hi Caledonia, Thank you for deciding to post this. I look forward to seeing more of your work in the future. I am just a hobbyist myself, so this is just my personal opinion but here goes. I like your poem, it creates some beautiful mental images and for some reason made me think of Wuthering Heights, but it left me with a couple of questions. 1. LIGHTENING (in title) Is the poem meant to be titled this way? LIGHTNING = weather stuff LIGHTENING = lifting the burden (or bleaching) As far as I can tell, it could go either way (not the bleaching way) There are a couple of spelling errors, which I assume you know about. 2. What is up with the character? This poem seems to work it's way through a time of emotional turmoil and reach a calmer place on the other side, but what is the turmoil? I can't find the why for this piece. Maybe it's a matter of personal taste, but I feel a need to see the reason for a piece, either in the title or the body of the work itself. Maybe I'm just terminally nosey. Overall though, I like it a lot. ps. Do you illustrate your work? This seems to be begging to be done in Vue:-)