A cop who knows what Hyacinths smell like (let alone what they are) is not someone who hangs out at donut shops I presume :) Great job creating character sympathy from the start. I liked the breathing love partner line. And coming from a coworker could it be humurous or emasculating. But it efficiently drew a picture of his social life. It began to seem like 'Body Heat' during their conversation and then the ending took a satisfying twist I didn't see coming. Very nice, Dialyn. I haven't seen CSI other than on commercials. I don't think fan fiction is less noble than working with original concepts. It may in fact be more challenging since you're limited by setting and audience expectations. Show us more. :)