It's a personal thing but I try to avoid phrases like "He gaped in disbelief." Can anyone guess why or am I alone in my resistence? The rest of your comments are well taken. Thank you for the feedback. I do appreciate it. Maybe one of these days I'll return to this story and rewrite with your ideas in mind. Actually there is another big mistake which no one has caught which has preyed on my mind. They tell him the body has been there for 48 hours but he is the one that would be determining that as the investigator. Oh well. On the list of things to fix. :)