Yeah, you're right about the ashes. I couldn't figure out how to get the cigarrette ash on the body without stepping on her line. You think the "irreverently" is necessary? Wouldn't that be clear by what she does? I don't like to interpret things for the reader if I can show them instead. I'll think about what to do about those ashes. Of course it's cold...it's supposed to spook you just a little. Just a little. :)