It looks pretty good, in many ways better than mine, and I've got weeks of work in mine! Maybe I'm expecting too much, hair is really just too tough with the tools we have now, the layers are only 2D, and if you can see them on edge they have no thickness, and if if you have too many you really can't see through them like you can on real hair. Maybe I'll go on to something else for now, and come back to this some other time. Maybe a better answer is put the detail in in the model- The modification to the Poser Hair that someone did (maybe you?) called "morph hair 5", the one that covers one side of the face, looks pretty good to me, second only to Allie's hair in my opinion (and better than than the other free hair that everybody uses),and it renders faster, too!