Forum: Writers


Subject: Invitation For Dialyn

ChuckEvans opened this issue on Sep 12, 2002 ยท 51 posts


Crescent posted Sat, 14 September 2002 at 10:48 AM

Okay, so Johnny has two left feet .... ;-) I meant that his left foot was by Billy's right knee and Johnny's right foot was in "goal kicker" position. I wasn't sure if the "other half" remark was clear. Billy amended Johnny's calculations of how much the money could buy, not one bag, but 1 1/2 bags of jawbreakers. I was trying to have Johnny say, "Oh, and you're expecting the other half bag?" but in a more menacing way. This has been a fun exercise! As I wrote, I kept stopping and thinking about what my writing books say about how to structure things, and I think the piece came out stronger than my older writing. Yep, still needed some editing in the final outcome, but you guys are forcing me to improve, so I'm a happy camper. Okay, we still have some hold outs! Who's next?