pairings Aching so...with Rewards so ...worth I think a quatrain may not be the best construction here. One stanza of free verse might be better. Also watch the difference between emphatic words and parenthetic words such as Mysterious treasure(emphatic the voice would be raised)my mind's intrigued(parenthetic the voice lowered). with desire(3) parenthetic should be seperated out by commas so it should be Aching so, with desire, to explore. Do you see what I'm trying to say? Keep up the good work don't be shy. Do it once mur(ouch). Give it another try. poetic liscence #z230 781 422 845.