The rhymes are quite clever, but perhaps a bit too clever. This one reads a bit stilted compared to your other poems. My guess is that parts of the poem seem a bit archaic to me languagewise, but other parts are more modern. You might want to make the poem's language remain old-fashioned throughout:

To know such beauty and never quest
Leaves an empty space within my breast.

(Breast is the more old fashioned way to say chest.)

Then again, my poetic license was yanked years ago because of DWI (Dabbling While Inept.) ;-)