DMFW, Let me start by saying that I have no credentials in the field of writing, unless you include the several papers I was forced to 'assemble' in college. I like what I see on the page but not necessarily in the order that they are written. For example the opening two lines could be combined and reordered as below. "Only the crumbling stone of an old pele tower stood against the bleak skyline, the metallic blue of a late October afternoon hardening to twilight over the Northumbrian moor . . ." only my opinion, -TJ