I don't know what you're apologizing for. The graphic tells the story. You used your considerable knowledge of lighting and color to create the mood. She's in a sad place, both physically and mentally, making the mistake (or the excuse) that she has no other choices when it is the choices she already made that brought her to this point and she could make others to get out. Here is my recommendation. Don't tag the graphic with words like "unsatisfactory." Let the graphic stand on its own without prejudging it and see what other people make of it. This is a graphic that was carefully thought out and lovingly created. Maybe there are things you want to change, but leave that for another time. The graphic and the poem had the creator they needed to have. They have the creator who cared about the subject and needed to communicate the scene. Anyone else would have been second best and it would have been make a mistake to overlay their vision on yours when yours, for this work, is the important one, and the only one needed. You may not want to hear it but, Chuck, I think the results are impressive, and much more interesting than all those Vickys and Mikes in the temple. At least to me.