Chuck, as it stands, the image and the poem have an impact, I would recommend against editing either in any way that reduces that impact, it complements both the image and the poem. on a slightly different note. in my past I have been in contact ( outreach work ) with the "working girls " one sticks in my mind because of a huge difference between her and your poem. she knowingly chose to walk the streets, as her second in class engineering degree would not make her as much money as hooking. ( only one person had higher marks in her engineering course ) she bought a brand new pathfinder and had it completely paid off withing two years from what she made hooking. while the majority are forced by other choices into it, there are a few that aren't.