That's a chilly little idea. As I slide down my fifth decade, I especially don't like the idea that: "As you get older, start falling apart and can no longer make positive contributions, that's when they start making withdrawals." It's bad enough I'm excluded from all the temples that Vickys are allowed into, but this disallows me from breathing. :( Guess I'd better start running! Kind of makes you wonder, though, if you can't "bank" points, what would the point be of being good or productive...since you're going to get knocked off as soon as you get older anyway, given this scenario. And what kind of society is left that defines productivity so narrowly? The one we are in, given the idolization of youth and beauty and retirees that are all of 30 and fast money, or one soon to come? Does make me think and does make me want to see the story more fleshed out, but, now that it's not going to be a contest, I'd want to see the protagonist more clearly. What happens if the bounty hunter decides not to hunt and thus become nonproductive, or becomes physically unable to hunt and also becomes nonproductive, or isn't as productive as another bounty hunter and so yet again becomes the hunted rather than the hunter (completely justified, I'd think). I think it's worth playing around with .... there's lots of ideas to explore if you are interested enough to do it.