Forum: Writers


Subject: One from me...

Hiram opened this issue on Dec 06, 2002 ยท 11 posts


Hiram posted Fri, 06 December 2002 at 6:13 PM

Rhythm wise, you mean? I have trouble with that one myself, but I never really got around to fixing it with something that made the same sense. In fact, I'm uncomfortable with the first and second lines of that verse.