I'm liking the way this is going....back and forth between the 'work/prisoner' reality and the 'dreamscape' reality. The looming 'crash' is building nicely. 

Thanks for posting these installments.  :)

thanx....we are heading out but will be checking in daily....take care....got the camera ready, hopefully no pics of snow   LOL

Yeah, we're from South Dakota....I'll take some pics as we drive through western Nebraska. The Sand Hills are beautiful and in the summer LOTS of sunflowers. I do remember a rendering plant somewhere along the way, our eyes teared for awhile after THAT.  lol

....as for the critical, the only thing for me so far is this part:

"Although he didn’t understand, he now realized that the thing was somehow beckoning him. He doubted if that was entirely true, but it was most certainly how he felt."

THE ONLY THING I WOULD HAVE DONE HERE [caps to delineate]  I would have put something like: The coldness of the floor sent a shiver through him as he put his foot down. He wasn't sure if it was the actual cold or the anticipation of the machine.

"Kneeling beside it, he touched the machine’s cold, smooth surface, and he shuddered, feeling both menaced, and comforted by it. His hand slid up the side, feeling the flexible tubing, and then the round top, a cool glassy surface. The entire experience was almost hypnotic."

I write a completely different style, I would never be able to do the detail and intricacies that you have in your story. I'll try to be more critical, just not much in my nature.  :)

Interesting twists and turns of the mind....we are heading out tomorrow morning and will be driving through Nebraska....sounded like the Route 2 drive....if you have never done it, drive through the Sand Hills in Nebraska and then on the roads you describe in your story....keep posting, we will be checking in over the next month as we travel.

good detail

Thank You   :)

I like the way you ar eincorporating the memories and they are so vivid.  :)

Good job!

leave that cat right where it is   :D

I am eager to find out what his 'crime' was. This is reminding me, in some ways, of Kafka's 'Metamorphisis', one of my favorite books.

Great job!

I like this....keep posting  :)

Thank you. I appreciate your help.  :)

I'll have to go back over the instructions to see what I've missed.

Good to hear that you enjoyed the piece.   take care

http://www.renderosity.com/mod/gallery/index.php?image_id=1644183

forgot the link    lol

I'm hooked   :)  Can't wait for the next chapter.

I'm 'second mother'  to a girl whose brother is serving in Iraq, a true Lakota Warrior. I hold much Gratitude for anyone who spends time in Iraq.

this is interesting, post more

btw-thank you

These are the vows that I read at my wedding this summer. A Traditional ceremony on the rez.

A Vow

Great Spirit wrote your name on my heart
before it's first beat

Your touch was on my skin
before I could feel

Your song filled my ears
before I ever heard

Your smile shone in my eyes
before I ever saw

Your desire was known to me
before I knew want

Your dreams were mine
before I ever slept

Your love was deep in my soul
before there was time

Your Spirit is connected with mine through Eternity

I Love You

(c)netsia