wait...wait...wait. Today is only the sixth. I put the challenge out to give y'all a day ta think 'bout it. I got dis at 19:05 on Sunday that's 7:05...Tomorrow, 5pm est c'mon G let's hang with what few rules there are. You're a good poet don't keep putting yourself out, then maybe it will B4U.

I think you need a comma in "by the water, dreams alone" there's an anticipated ceasura there that improves the flow the comma just helps set it off. I saw the pic yesterday I was wondering about the rest of the song because you kinda left it hanging. I like the soft lighting.

Getting published is a drug anyone whose ever had something printed, even a letter to the editor of the local newspaper can tell you that. I had a column in a local newspaper for about four months, and even getting flak from those who read what I wrote was part of the high. I was part of a local writer's group that consisted of pubished writers, poets, english teachers, hobbyists and others, and the comments were constructive...nobody likes a poison person. I hope you see my criticisms as constructive plus I always like to TBT the authors intent (to be true).

I'm still trying to speak Bulgarian...Hey I was gonna wait until Monday and try and write everything down nice and thoughtfully in between times I'd like to run it for about 10 days no more because you guys have got me lookin' up stuff left and right.

oh my said the snake You're just a bit late I always eat nice fat toads but when you dropped in to sweeten my chin I found I'd just eaten canary. Nice ace but the match was yesterday. I hadn't mentioned the new challenge yet so here I am stuck in the middle with you as the song goes. I score it EMLOTE (e-mail later on this eve)

I'll have to get the ISPCE Handbook (International Society for the Prevention of Cruelty to Ears) Most of the trouble comes with the fact that I am only one person and I don't see everything all the time. The object of the last challenge was to break into freestyle. I was,in fact leaning away from rhymes, I was looking for consonnance and quasieuphonic word pairs. I didn't consider meter, but Chucks poem was so well balanced I did give him some points. I was tempted to give R2B more points for her use of the tilde when changing scenes, but on such a small poem her rapid pace of scene change was like a revolving door. Considering her subject I thought that was a good effect. I have learned my lessons from this experience and I am instructing the Bulgarian judge. When I give points for something I'll write it down and try to be consistent. I do like parallel structure and when the catalog goes to a high point. Chuck's poem had a catalog, but it seemed to ramble. The old man in the wheel chair as an image, I couldn't consider that as a zenith or a nadir. I have another idea in the works its: Does all poetry have to be dark...Now Bart Simpson once said "Writing depressing songs for teenagers is like shooting fish in a barrel"., well what's the challenge in that?

The results are in and we have a winner...but the clunker wasn't part of a poem so I'm having a little trouble here. the results are as follows: tresamie 17/12= 1.41 Caledonia 14.5/8= 1.81 Crescent 8/7= 1.14 Chuck E 12/8= 1.5 R2B 14/10= 1.4 Looks like Cal gets the first seat in the laureate square The clunker award goes to Crescent for deranged haiku the picture of yoko singing kligon opera in the shower.... if it were part of the poem you'ld be in the square. I wanted to score Knot4U but it was Knot2B the rhymes were too rhymy. You all game to give it another go on the same field?

Ok R2b let's see what we got here.... moanings-shadows-swallow 2 hands-feet-body catalog ascending action to zenith 3 as-alas-hands assonance 2 endure-floor 1 floor-forth 1 fetal-seeking-glory 2 a tiny newborn man recap and summary 2 use of tilde to show rapid change of scene 1 that's a 14 for a 10 liner. No I did not work for Anderson and Assoc...but wait till you see the next trick. The poems will be directly compared and the winner will have their name placed in the laureate square, a square on the backpage,hopefully in the upper right hand corner, until bumped by another contest...Unless our laureate successfully defends his square.

For chuck: slowly-smoothly 1 down-ground high-sky 2 bal 2 music-ears color-eyes 2 open-old chair-cheer-childhood 2 close-carousel again-friend ok I got an 12 hopefully I didnt miss anything.

Great poem Dialyn a little long for the challenge but right on and I'm dating myself on the word choad I'm afraid.

Deranged haiku...I think I'll give you five points for that,but you get to go on with Drew at the end of the show and sing the Hoedown. A 7 liner Ummm-Hmmm 1 Sublime write rhyme 3 Contest lost toast 3 mods--pud 1 The mod was good enough for some.Feen should be a natural Rendered2blue where's yours. You get an 8 for that one I still like deranged Haiku sounds like Yoko singing Klingon opera.

Not just CL.

Ok now this is difficult...a good poem but missed on the guidelines. I liked it so I don't want to say anything bad but you have to free it up because you're still stuck.

So write accidental poetry and don't worry about it.

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