Tell me this isn't happening!

I had to fix my beginning to leave out a lot of the descriptive stuff for a later period in the story where a more detailed description made more sense.

Leave a post on where to buy the finished product, too, please. I want to know how it turns out. To quote a stupid character in a movie I once saw, "I'd buy that for a dollar!"

I had to fix my beginning to leave out a lot of the descriptive stuff for a later period in the story where a more detailed description made more sense.

Leave a post on where to buy the finished product, too, please. I want to know how it turns out. To quote a stupid character in a movie I once saw, "I'd buy that for a dollar!"

A case of TMI---too much information...or TLI, too little. Probably when you decide the direction the story is taking, you can fix it easily. I'd like to know more about the "hero". Maybe the bartender found him "familiar" but couldn't place him exactly. Try fleshing out the scenery. U don't need to include all the details in the paragraph, but you should know exactly where your character is. Maybe our hero had been here in the past and found it just as it had been, or not.... Just a thought. I'm trying to write, too. The settings are HARD! Knowing the character is easier. Let the reader come to know him, too.

Good on you! Our fingers are crossed! Grannie {^|^} ~

:D Boy, oh boy, did U ever get me or what! Thanks for the chuckle.+|+ O LOL

Wish in vain for warmth,
long hot nights, and kisses,
loving on the beach.

Kind of gritty. I liked it.

Outlook? It's the one we use at work and has all the bells and whistles. Microsoft Office has one built in, too, I believe GranniePeggy1940

I agree. Hide your punch so that it hits with all the force of an h-bomb. Don't tell us she forgot about the bracelet, and you have a story that punches us right in the gut. Very good job. Dsynr

Proclaim, "Finals Coming!" Books, papers, reading, Studying, all night.

Season turned brown-red Winds whispers then howls: Winter is coming

Is English your first language? Did U spell-check this before submitting? If , your checker is broken.

I love it!

I'm not ready for publishing yet. I have a teensy, tiny bit of EDITING to do yet. LOL. I've just started and already I'm re-writing the intro completely. Sigh. I called my journal "Enslaver of the Muse." Maybe it's the other way around......I'm keeping the info. Thanks a bunch. Dsynr