== The Beginning ==

In the late afternoon on a summer day in July, she was born. The anticipation regressed, opening her eyes for the first time, she took a quick glance around. she'll never forget the first time she saw it.

Typing "I wish you were here." She had met this guy about two weeks before, and she was falling for this stranger. She had seen him before. Yet she was too shy to introduce herself. They continued their conversation. "What's the catch?" She said, "What are you talking about?" He replied. "Everything about you is perfect, there has to be a flaw." , "If I told you, you wouldn't believe me anyways." She sat up in her seat and said "Please, I want to know everything about you." Finally he replied, "What do you think about the supernatural?" She says, "I don't know what you mean." , "Do you believe?" At this point she was trembling in her chair, awaiting the truth. What could this mean? Is he trying to tell me he's some sort of alien? No, that's impossible. She didn't reply. She logged off and went to bed. She was too terrified to find out the truth.
   The next morning she logged on to her messenger. There was an unread urgent message left for her. She opened it up, she became pale as snow as her hands fell from the table in disbelief. The message had read:

My Dear Love,
     I have been keeping a very strange secret from you. Before I tell you, I want you to know that the moment I layed my eyes on you, I couldn't look away. I kept telling myself "look away so she doesn't see you staring". You came into my life two weeks ago and I couldn't be happier that you did. This may seem impossible but, I have been born into a very strange circumstance. I was born a killer. Not just any killer, a killer with a destiny. I will explain further once I know that you truly love me.
Sincerely Yours,
     Odji
  P.S. Meet me at the corner of Jackson and Harbor in the old warehouse at 9:00pm.

   Her heart skipped, she could not decide whether to follow through for the man she had fallen for or to leave and never return.

   Time flew by, she was stumped. Who knows what will happen if she goes. Then again what will happen if she doesn't. She finally made up her mind. By that time it was a quarter till 9. How was she supposed to get all the way across town in 15 minutes on a bike? She took the chance and just left. She had gotten there about 9:30pm and he was nowhere in sight. She got on her bike and left to go home. When she got there, she had gotten another message from him. It said, "I told you to be there. Now you will find out the hard way." She was so terrified, she called the police and asked them to send an escort to take her to a nearby hotel. She quickly packed up her things and waited outside. The paranoia set in. Every time somebody would look at her, she would tremble in fear. The escort finally got there. She arrived at the hotel and checked in. When she opened her door, her jaw dropped. There he was standing at the window. She could see a dim red aura coming from his eyes. She drops everything and runs to the phone. Too late. He had somehow teleported across the room. She falls to the floor and lets out a blood-curdling scream. All he did was sit there and watch as she struggled to stand up. He finally spoke, "What do you live for?" She replies as her eyes are swelled with tears, "Are you going to kill me?" "No. Not yet." He walks towards her and grabs her hands. "Don't struggle" He said in a calm voice. "I will not hurt you, but let me ask you one question. Do you love me?" She hesitates to reply, "Y-yes, I do, Honestly." She straightens herself up. "What is going on?" He gently wraps his arms around her. What happens next, you will never believe. Only when true love is together, will you see everything disappear. The only thing you have is in your arms. I advise you to never let go. I have heard that when you let go, you will fall for eternity. Never to love again.

This is a short story i had just written. I don't know where else to get it critiqued. could you guys give me some feedback?