Forum: Writers


Subject: [ZpellXc]

Tanialmeida opened this issue on Feb 03, 2003 ยท 3 posts


Tanialmeida posted Mon, 03 February 2003 at 8:45 AM

be till end of time bodiless kiss inside my mind beyond the track there is a path wisely I kiss myself watch for what I cannot tell wish you mine sweet caress a song along the way a smile inside the sun a shadow tree of memories!


tjames posted Mon, 03 February 2003 at 4:11 PM

Excellent bone structure. I would have capitalized the first B of the first line just as an emphatic. Be till the end of time bodiless kiss inside my mind beyond the track there is a path It's kind of like taking a breath and then starting the poem.


Tanialmeida posted Mon, 03 February 2003 at 5:23 PM

thank u for taking the tm to comment tjames