Tanialmeida opened this issue on Feb 03, 2003 ยท 8 posts
Tanialmeida posted Mon, 03 February 2003 at 8:47 AM
on travelling lands i am the dreamer of the dream the dream of a dreamer hacking on my future!
tjames posted Mon, 03 February 2003 at 4:20 PM
Hacking...does that signify that a dream is some sort of encroachment on a secure area? Isn't "i" the dreamer mentioned? The future is hardly secure, a dream is the subconscious making sense of seemingly unrelated events and integrating them with known responses to come up with an answer. On the conscious level sometimes we can't see the forest for the trees.
Tanialmeida posted Mon, 03 February 2003 at 5:21 PM
this means i am the only and solely responsible for my future dreams ;0] and then again what is the forest without the trees? love ur comments xzpecially comming from such an incredible writter thank u
tjames posted Mon, 03 February 2003 at 6:15 PM
The comments are extremely important. When you only have 4 lines little items carry a lot more weight.
Crescent posted Wed, 05 February 2003 at 8:28 PM
I like the first two lines, very soft and melodious, but I'm tripped up on the last two. I don't see why you inverted line 2 to create line three - I can't figure out what line 3 means. Hacking seems a bit strong for the poem. The rest of the poem has softer consonnents. Maybe "crafting" or "forging" might work better sound-wise. Standard disclaimer - I've a tin ear for poetry, so it's quite possible (likely) that I'm missing subtle nuances. Glad to see another poet join our ranks!
ynsaen posted Thu, 06 February 2003 at 2:15 AM
Dreams are the pandering of the id for the ego to awaken...
thou and I, my friend, can, in the most flunkey world, make, each of us, one non-flunkey, one hero, if we like: that will be two heroes to begin with. (Carlyle)
Tanialmeida posted Thu, 06 February 2003 at 6:23 AM
thank u crescent, i'm glad to be here too ;0]
Tanialmeida posted Thu, 06 February 2003 at 6:26 AM
ynsaen ur words are so true this is about make dreams come true!