O.K. so I tried to take all the comments made in my last critiquing session and incorporate them into this page here. Firstly I decided to put my "epic" comic on hold and try doing shorter vignettes of 10 pages or so, so I can work on technique without getting too wrapped up in presenting my story satisfactorilly. So, I've worked on my camera focals and angles, tried to work on my lighting (though I realize its still far from perfect, I think it's better than last time), changed my font, changed my text bubbles, got myself a new character texture or two, checked my spelling (I hope) and did a little more postwork. I'll get to compositing when I have more than one character in a scene. So here's a sample page that I'd love to hear more constructive criticsm on, especially from those who commented on my last comic pages about three weeks ago. But any thoughtful suggestions and insights would be appreciated. Thanks, Unzipped