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I wrote this a while ago it's actually 3 different works put together in an animation. The first text goes with animation, of Ilestra who will be the main character even though the story was supposed to happened centuries ago. I want the viewer to know it's supposed to be in the past but I want the viewer brought into the story so to speak. I know in writing your supposed to stay in one tense, as such I am trying to figure out how I want to approach this. The first text is the past but is also where the story is headed. The second part is where the story is and where the animated story, and the game begins. Is it fine as is, with one voice? Or is it fine as is with two voices? Maybe an older male for the first text and a younger male or female for the narration? Or does it need more reworking than that, In your opinions? Thanks, Martin / Deimos -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- It was the fourth age, the age of man, when our books of lore first record the legends of Ilestra. She was mother to the second line of the Eldar; And one of the greatest heroes of the Killrana wars. Some believe she still watches over us and that her children still walk among us. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Outside the Kingdom's Capital is an ancient Tower; for centuries the King's Chief Councilors and Arch Mages have resided in this Tower. Legend says the Tower existed here before man came to this land's shores. It has been five years since the Great War and the Arch Mage Valester has used the assassination of Lord Balador to have the King disband the knight-hood of the Lance, the King's elite knights. Bal-Mandrin, a bardic knight and a master of the Knight of the Lance, poses as an apprentice mage to Valester. His espionage has provided him with scrolls that implicate Valester of supporting the Renegade Lord Farenil who is a usurper. While spying on Lord Valester Bal-Mandrin finds that in one of Valester's private libraries there is a book that when moved opens a hidden passage. The Temple fires had been lit; this time not summon the people of the town for worship, but to warn them and the out lying lands that an army was marching towards the town of Wakenhood . Would be heroes prepared through out the near by lands for the upcoming engagement. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------