Writing short can be a challenge, at least for me. The last contest was looking for 1000 words. My story ended up at 999 words, not counting the title and author, but only after significant editing. The original was in excess of 1700 words, still very short by most standards. So I'm curious to see what people think of the long and the sort of it. Here is The Apprentice, first as submitted for the contest, then in its longer form. I'd be curious to know what you all think when you compare the two. Did the edits help or hurt? Which do you prefer? jon

 
~jon
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