Ok, here's the next draft if you will. A bit better quality of render as well. Rotated the bodyguard in a bit more. Not sure it's enough yet. Thanks for viewing and the feedback.

Hi Corwin, this is what I would do: First, I would reconsider that many lights in the scene, light wise, this image still does not have enough focus on central figure (inside pentagram). If you realy want to keep all the lights, try to fiddle with range (i would try squared for more dramatic effect, try also converting some of them to spotlights and pointing them towards figure inside pentagram). Soft shadows should be turned on, if you want to get rid of those shadow lines on the figure on the right. At the end, maybe reducing saturation a bit in 2D program like PSP would improve it even more :D Anyways, good luck to ya, and looking forward to see your final render ! :)

I havn't had much luck with the soft shadow effect. It makes the shadows look airbrushed on and not in a good way. I'll see if it's tuned on in the sky lab though.