Warblade opened this issue on Jan 09, 2005 ยท 15 posts
Warblade posted Sun, 09 January 2005 at 2:12 PM
pauljs75 posted Sun, 09 January 2005 at 2:28 PM
It's probably the placement of the subject. She's directing the focus totally off the scene. Move her over 1/3 to the right. Also you might have to do something about the background placement so you don't get mergers or too distracted. (Same rules as with getting a good picture in photography.) Other than that, dunno what else could be done.
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tjohn posted Sun, 09 January 2005 at 2:55 PM
Hope she's got plenty of sunscreen, LOL. I agree with Paul. Of course you'll need to move the flag if you do that. Good solid start.
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drawbridgep posted Sun, 09 January 2005 at 3:46 PM
I guess the g-forces broke her zipper? ;-) I like the low view point, but I see what Paul means. Maybe face her towards the camera? How about Depth of Field? Blur the tank busters a little? Perhaps have some things in the foreground (blurred again), oil drums, or crates or missiles. Dunno, just thinking out loud now.
pumecobann posted Sun, 09 January 2005 at 4:19 PM
"I guess the g-forces broke her zipper?" Let's hear it for "G-FORCES"! Seriously though, what drawbridgep said - DOF!
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diolma posted Sun, 09 January 2005 at 4:29 PM
Agree with the above, but also the nearest aircraft seems to be floating (nose-wheel not touching ground). I also feel there's something wrong with the composition, but being somewhat weak in that area myself, I daren't criticise, let alone offer suggestions. Nice start! Cheers, Diolma
Slakker posted Sun, 09 January 2005 at 6:01 PM
the ground texture looks like it could use some bump, as does the fabric...much of the scene really just looks too "Barbie" and fake. working on textures would definitely help this scene a lot. Good start, i like the idea.
lordstormdragon posted Sun, 09 January 2005 at 7:16 PM
Aye, I think the scene is fine, only the POV is off. Notice how much empty, dry space there is at the foreground and bottom right? Take your camera up a bit, and toss some rocks and dirt and grass down there. Not much, but something to fill the emptiness... Also, lighting. Turn off the sun and try relighting the scene with radials, or a few key spotlights Targeted at key objects. Once you're satisfied with that, perhaps try tossing in a small light dome to fill out the shadows. Don't bother with millions of lights, just try a 16 or 20 light dome approximately where your sun would be shining from, might help add to realism...?
CrazyDawg posted Sun, 09 January 2005 at 9:01 PM
Warblade something is missing alright, where is the hangers for the planes. Place one our two in the background. thats just something i thought could had a bit more to the image.
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TheBryster posted Mon, 10 January 2005 at 7:32 AM Forum Moderator
I think she's missing that 'Mech' thing..you know...that tank on 2 legs...sorta..ed209 thing from Robocop....? Totally hot image but the palmtrees are obviously clones....a bit of a rethink here perhaps?
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Aldaron posted Mon, 10 January 2005 at 11:51 AM
Check the wheels on the planes, they aren't touching the ground, especially the front.
tjohn posted Mon, 10 January 2005 at 4:06 PM
Aldaron: Check post #6. :^)
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Vile posted Mon, 10 January 2005 at 10:30 PM
I like a lot of it except the ground texture could be a lot better more bumpy!
MRIguy posted Mon, 17 January 2005 at 9:35 PM
What separates an ordinary Bryce image from an extraordinary one?
Detail!
One normally sees a hanger or two (in the background) where mechanics would work on the planes. What about an air control tower? Ground is too flat for sand, try changing to asphalt/ runway (with markings). Lastly, you may want to watch "Top Gun" and look at the airstrip /airbase scenes for those details like a fueling point near the aircraft, etc.
BTW, Good image!
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pauljs75 posted Wed, 19 January 2005 at 2:40 AM
If it's military aircraft, there isn't necessarily any control tower or hangars if it's a forward base. Perhaps some supply and fuel trucks, some tents or netting, and perhaps grids for the planes to taxi or land on. Such facilities could be quite spartan compared to a regular airfield.
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