Carolly recommended "Language of the Night" in another thread. I would also like to suggest you check out another book by her called "Steering the craft; exercises and discussions on story writing for the Lone Naviagator or the Mutinous Crew." My favorite chapter introduction is the one to the punctuation section: "Damn the semicolons cried the captain full speed ahead" [sic]. If you live close to a reasonably large library, you should be able to find either one or both of the books in the collection.