Amilcar83 opened this issue on Oct 13, 2005 ยท 5 posts
Amilcar83 posted Thu, 13 October 2005 at 10:23 AM
TheBryster posted Thu, 13 October 2005 at 2:07 PM Forum Moderator
You might wanna consider your speeling of the word 'PANAMAS'. If this is supposed to be 'posessive'(belonging to) it should be PANAMA'S FINEST Just a thought....
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UVDan posted Thu, 13 October 2005 at 6:10 PM Forum Moderator
Looks fine to me. You have to watch those pesky parents and their explicit lyrics.
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pumecobann posted Fri, 14 October 2005 at 2:27 PM
Makes me wonder what the lyrics are ;-) Len.
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diolma posted Fri, 14 October 2005 at 2:44 PM
Agree w TheBryster re: "Panama's". My only other crit would be that I find the transparency on the face is possibly a bit too strong. I keep looking at that bit (the human eye is strongly drawn to faces), and trying to decide just what, exactly, is under the bits hidden by the background. Reducing the transparancy might bring the face more into focus...:-) But, of course, it's up to you.. Cheers, Diolma