midrael opened this issue on Aug 07, 2006 · 24 posts
midrael posted Mon, 07 August 2006 at 12:04 PM
Hey everyone!
Jstro started a wonderful thread in July challenging everyone to create a poem using the cinquain style. I thought for August, we could try out a new style of poetry that not everyone may be familiar with. It's called Diamante Style poetry.
Basically, Damante Style poetry is diamond shaped. Here are the rules of creating a Diamante Style poem.
Diamante Style- is a seven-lined contrast poem set up in a diamond shape.
Line 1: Noun or subject
Line 2: Two Adjectives
Line 3: Three -ing words
Line 4: Four words about the subject
Line 5: Three -ing words
Line 6: Two adjectives
Line 7: Synonym/antonym for the subject
Try one out! I look forward to reading what everyone comes up with! =)
David L.
Writer's Forum Moderator
midrael posted Mon, 07 August 2006 at 12:14 PM
Here's my attempt at this style of poetry. Phew, it's a little harder than I thought ;)
Night
mysterious, seductive
longing, embracing, romancing
stars, moon, colors, dawn
growing, brightening, warming
active, vibrant
Day
David L.
dialyn posted Mon, 07 August 2006 at 1:55 PM
Bella
terrible, excitable
barking, running, jumping
furry, sweet, smart, silly
protecting, loving, sleeping
dog
I'm really bad at poetry.
I like yours. :)
midrael posted Mon, 07 August 2006 at 3:18 PM
Heheheh I liked yours too dialyn =) Not bad at all!
And it sounds like Bella is still quite a handful! ;)
David L.
dialyn posted Mon, 07 August 2006 at 3:33 PM
She's a darling...when she's asleep. Woof.
zanografix posted Tue, 08 August 2006 at 10:14 AM
Well formatting is the issue here
War
Bombs, battle
Preventing, preferring, promoting
Vengeance, violence, victors, vanquished
Retreating, retiring, returning
Homefront, horror
Death
midrael posted Tue, 08 August 2006 at 11:36 AM
Much nicer diamond shape than mine! ;)
And a very powerful poem I think. There's a lot of strong imagery-invoking words used. Nice entry =)
David L.
heartnsoul posted Sun, 20 August 2006 at 12:45 AM
This is my first time in the forum. My mind is racing already wth this one. And here I thought I was having writers block. Thank you, for clearing a path. Ahh....I have to come back, stuck on line 6. The poems are beautiful. Deeply thought provoking. This is similar to the lanturne. Not as easy as it looks.
Michelle
midrael posted Mon, 21 August 2006 at 10:17 AM
I'm glad you're enjoying them and I look forward to reading what you come up with! =)
David L.
heartnsoul posted Mon, 21 August 2006 at 6:25 PM
FLAT?
ocean
buoyant salty
fishing sailing exploring
majestic adventure hypnotic horizon
sparkling unforgiving rocking
turbulent vast
sea
Whoa this wasn't easy! I even wound up changing words so that I would keep the diamond shape. I initially had the word "flat?" in the 6th line, but also didn't want to give up "vast" so for a lighter side put it in the title. I rarely write without a title. While I know this is an exercise its just a habit I have. I don't know what took me so long to come here, but I'm so glad I finally did. I'm genuinely excited about your forum!
Michelle
jstro posted Tue, 22 August 2006 at 6:38 PM
Oh good. I have to go and do some thinking. Hope it doesn't hurt much!
~jon
~jon
My Blog - Mad
Utopia Writing in a new era.
midrael posted Tue, 22 August 2006 at 8:46 PM
Nice poem heartnsoul! =) You definitely nailed the shape and I like your word choice. I think the extra time you took thinking about it was worth it!
Welcome to the forum! =)
And looking forward to yours Jon! I was wondering when you were going to come up with one! ;)
David L.
heartnsoul posted Tue, 22 August 2006 at 10:16 PM
Quote - Nice poem heartnsoul! =) You definitely nailed the shape and I like your word choice. I think the extra time you took thinking about it was worth it!
Welcome to the forum! =)
And looking forward to yours Jon! I was wondering when you were going to come up with one! ;)
David L.
Thank you David I enjoyed this. There is so much to learn here. I know I will be busy. Navigating is taking me a little time but I will get the hang of it.
Michelle
midrael posted Wed, 23 August 2006 at 10:45 AM
If you have any questions, don't hesitate to ask!
Out of all the forums on Renderosity, the writer's forum is probably the slowest since it's the smallest community, but we're all very friendly and more than happy to help!
David L.
Writer's Forum Moderator
dialyn posted Thu, 24 August 2006 at 8:39 AM
We're not slow, we're just thinking.
:b_sleeping:
heartnsoul posted Thu, 24 August 2006 at 9:12 AM
Quote - We're not slow, we're just thinking.
:b_sleeping:
hahahah.....I like that one...that's a keeper!!
WiseHanna posted Tue, 29 August 2006 at 5:14 AM
Hi,
I like this format. I used to write Pantoum poems which also dictate a certain order of lines.
Here is my first Diamante.
Dead End
Cancer
Deadly, horrendous
Tiring, overbearing, increasing
Disease, doctors, chemo, weakness
Living, hoping, praying
Wishful, hateful
Death
midrael posted Tue, 29 August 2006 at 10:47 AM
I really like this one, especially since my family has had its own personal experience with cancer. The emotional words in it definitely speak to me. Very nice poem.
heartnsoul posted Tue, 29 August 2006 at 1:19 PM
Quote - Hi,
I like this format. I used to write Pantoum poems which also dictate a certain order of lines.
Here is my first Diamante.
Dead End
Cancer
Deadly, horrendous
Tiring, overbearing, increasing
Disease, doctors, chemo, weakness
Living, hoping, praying
Wishful, hateful
Death
This was powerful!! Definately great word choices. For those of who have dealt with CA.....myself included, not only does it hit close to home.. you've landed a bullseye. ~Michelle~
heartnsoul posted Tue, 29 August 2006 at 1:32 PM
I don't know if we are allowed more than one....
Happiness Is...
circles
big, rainbows
blowing, reflecting, shimmering
magical, laughter, delicate, irridescent
floating, touching, popping,
tickles, small
bubbles
Hope you like it......I just had to write something about them.....I love bubbles, you can't help but smile when you see them. Even your soul smiles!
WiseHanna posted Tue, 29 August 2006 at 3:42 PM
Thanks.
I wanted to say that I like the poem about war very much. What makes it special is the use of words that start with the same letter throughout each line.
I wonder if this is required by this format?
Hanna
War
Bombs, battle
Preventing, preferring, promoting
Vengeance, violence, victors, vanquished
Retreating, retiring, returning
Homefront, horror
Death
WiseHanna posted Tue, 29 August 2006 at 3:58 PM
Dear Heartnsoul,
I like your poem, and I like bubbles too... always been fascinated by their rainbow colours...
If I may, I would like to point out a couple of points to notice in your poem.
1. Second line requires the use of adjectives. The word "rainbows" is a noun and together with the previous word "big" makes the line a sentence, a short one at that... lol
I think it would be easy to replace these words, unlike in other forms of poetry.
Hanna
jstro posted Thu, 31 August 2006 at 6:56 PM
Never Happy
J.M. Strother
August;
Miserable, sticky.
Sweltering, Steaming, Sweating.
Apparently, satisfaction's never found.
Freezing, forbidding, fatiguing.
Miserable, cold;
February.
Better late than never, eh? I'm not sure I like this form – it seems too restrictive. I sort of like the 1-2-3-4-3-2-1 format, but I don't really care for specifics of having to use two adjectives and three -ing words for lines two and three. Seems to handcuff the writer, to my way of thinking. Still, and interesting challenge. Glad I made it while we're still in August.
~jon
~jon
My Blog - Mad
Utopia Writing in a new era.
midrael posted Mon, 04 September 2006 at 8:00 PM
It's always been my opinion that, given the choice between format and idea conveyed, I tend to make sure that my idea is conveyed.
On that note, I'm glad to see that you submitted! =) A good entry as well!
David L.