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Standing in the shower, for the past hour it
Comments (4)
angel_of_darkness
sounds like it could be a great song!!
vaggabondd
if you want it to be a song then it needs more lines if you want it to be a poem its just right. I like it a great deal. Very nice
Shabetei
I agree with vaggabondd. In my opinion of what I would do, would be to add an additional verse that contains the chorus. The chorus part is very catchy for a song.
88
I agree-- more lines if it's going to be a song, but it's fine as a poem, too...