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ROADBURN

Writers People posted on May 03, 2008
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I am, at best, a reluctant driver � indeed I didn't learn to drive until 40 years old, and only did so then because it was necessary for my job. I have no interest whatsoever in cars [except as design objects] and speed in any form holds no thrills. Yet ... when I am badly hurt emotionally or under stress I find a moderately long drive strangely calming and comforting. It may be because I'm so focussed on the act of driving - I'd pass my own children without noticing - that it gives some much-needed respite from any unwanted pain or misery. The drive described below was from my ex-wife's new home to my stepfather's house where I then lived, a journey of less than forty minutes. I'd just been given the second shocking instalment of her long list of infidelities. Ahead was the only way. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- The sun was shining Even when it shines it looks like rain Well I'm passing through and I'm on the move And I'm road burned, road burned again I've got this groove and I'm on the move And I'm road burned, road burned again I'm cuttin' tracks and I won't come back Cause I'm road burned, road burned again ROADBURN Melanie Safka ROADBURN It is clear from the scuffed shuffle shoulders askew and the baleful backward glare that there is anger here, and the glisten on the cheeks signifies distress in some measure: the car door slam punctuates the mood. First off, we note with some distress, a slantwise, tangential kick-off from kerb gears in a grind, maximum revs on the grim gritty highways in the immutable, immoveable impassable city of hard angles and harder truths. Now, in the merry-go-round meander of the metropolitan maze a mish-mash of closed in corners and caught in cul-de-sacs a warp in the weft of the night's grubby weave of concrete and seamless, sullen sky, we see the scurry of the seeker of selective amnesia rattled but rolling exit-bound. Aside, on the very verge, roadside hopefuls [females all] stand, thumbs raised prettily - skirts too, wolf-whistle high and rising, a sensual sidetrack spurned and barely sensed in the soporific solitude of settled speed and cyclopean sight. Behind, rear view mirrored black road ribbon disappears like broken trust, Behind, the tyre-seared tarmac tapers to nothing, like absent faith Ahead, just ahead, low to the ground with hasteless speed crosses the hurtling path a [classify] what's that: cat? not cat! the hint-glint of eyes, the tail, the size signifies fox; fearless, fine, and finally free ahead just ahead.

Comments (21)


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STEVIEUKWONDER

4:51AM | Sat, 03 May 2008

Lovely words Mike. I admire your command of Her Majesty's English, without equivocation of any kind. Steve :o)

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tallpindo

4:57AM | Sat, 03 May 2008

Raspberries for that! She hopes you'll miss the signal change and the flash of recogniton will be karma's own. Anger is a prop not made in Hollywood and not kept in Simi Valley to be dug out by some Charles Manson host. Hate is being toyed with. It is just a bartender. Have another.

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G_Mansco

6:21AM | Sat, 03 May 2008

Splendid work in all ways ;O)

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RodolfoCiminelli

6:44AM | Sat, 03 May 2008

Fantastic realization my friend......!!!!

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dhanco

6:46AM | Sat, 03 May 2008

Beautiful and provocative words that so perfectly describe the pain and hurt, Mike. Have done the same (long drives) a few times myself. Thank you for sharing you.

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helanker

9:47AM | Sat, 03 May 2008

Oh and I do the opposite. I never take the car if I am in anger. I would drive too fast, then. :)

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avalonfaayre

9:48AM | Sat, 03 May 2008

Funny isn't it, how you can cease to love the person, but the pain from their actions remains. How can you not care about the person yet still feel the pain of the betrayal? Interesting. I can't figure it out. Why does the fact that it happened hurt so badly when I don't have any feelings for him other than relief that I am free of the constant torment? I don't understand why they feel the need to put the burden of their infidelities upon the innocent one. Sorry for the rant. This touched some sore places.

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AusPoet

10:17AM | Sat, 03 May 2008

So quietly compelling, so much feeling so beautifully contained. Well done Mike, truly great work.

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beachzz

10:27AM | Sat, 03 May 2008

You describe the whole scene with such clarity, such poignancy; slamming doors, revved engines, the red glow in front of your eyes, and finally a bit of calm as the road demands your attention. Oh yeah, been there, done that, though for not quite the same reasons~~masterful!!!

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novelist

10:59AM | Sat, 03 May 2008

Wow. Your love of words shows in each poem you write. I appreciate how carefully you choose your details. Your phrasing is lovely. I especially love the ending lines to this poem. They provide an impact and are just right for this mood. I rarely comment on writing out here. Your poetry is worth reading again and again.

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auntietk

11:21AM | Sat, 03 May 2008

Wonderful metaphor, masterfully done. So often I sit, jaw on floor, amazed anew by your talent.

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romanceworks

11:35AM | Sat, 03 May 2008

Your words carry the impact of your feelings so beautifully. Many a tear has been shed inside cars and hurts scattered on the endless road behind and ahead. CC

lil_t

11:39AM | Sat, 03 May 2008

I too, can relate to this Mike, thanks for putting the words out there for me! Beautifully written! Such talent... you have!

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leanndra

1:18PM | Sat, 03 May 2008

"a warp in the weft of the night's grubby weave of concrete and seamless, sullen sky, we see the scurry of the seeker of selective amnesia rattled but rolling exit-bound". Mike, these lines really touched my heart more than the rest of your prose. The seeker of selective amnesia may play those little head games, but in the quiet of the night, when dawn is long in coming, I believe that seeker faces the truth of the situation. They can't escape what they have done and they can't placate their conscience with 'selective amnesia'. Your words are always so poignant. You have a true gift of evoking a deep emotional response in your readers. Many if not all of us have been betrayed in like manner and we feel with you and experience the loss that you have experienced and the losses that we ourselves remember. Beautifully written words. Lea

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algra

1:43PM | Sat, 03 May 2008

Driving on such a highway must be a pleasure, in our country traffic is a madhouse. Wonderful mood in this picture, but sorry, the prose is too difficult for me.

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Meisiekind

1:54PM | Sat, 03 May 2008

I think we all can relate to this somehow. Thank you dear Mike for sharing this lovely poem of sadness and pain. Hugs, Carin xx

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busi2ness

3:13PM | Sat, 03 May 2008

The rhythm of seemingly endless driving is well captured in the text.

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hipps13

8:42PM | Sat, 03 May 2008

Hi Mike I love to drive and think sometimes what fun it would have been to become a race car driver or even a top-fuel driver wonderful work warm hug, Linda

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LovelyPoetess

11:06PM | Sun, 04 May 2008

I have many a time used the road as a balm to soothe an emotional pain. You've caught the essence of the process with your words here. thank you for sharing such a succinctly captured 40 minutes. : )

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amirapsp

4:04PM | Thu, 15 May 2008

I just love what you did here...Hugs

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sassydog

12:50PM | Sat, 17 May 2008

Wow, lot of pain there. (in your words & your image I mean) I'm glad to see that you are putting it to good use. I hope you don't mind me saying that your poem sounds more like a AC/DC rock song and the image would make an excellent CD cover. Good work! I wish you well.


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