The Crash by EdKline

Vue • Science Fiction • posted on Jun 17, 2010

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In a red agony of feeling, Dutch slowly became conscious. He was dimly aware of strange odors mixed with the harsh fumes of burning insulation and super-heated metals. The anamorphic grids were dead. No shields. No power. Nothing. He tensed, trying to see Neville and Mitzy through the smoke. Movement off to his right, then... "D-Dutch?" *cough* "I'm over here Mitz, the DC-3's had it. We're actually breathing the planet's atmosphere. All systems are off line, including shields." "Well, at least we're still alive," coughed Neville. "Yeah, for how long? Someone blasted us, Neville. It was dumb luck we grounded in one piece... more or less." A sudden wave of pain swept through him and awareness fled, leading him into darkness once again.

Comments (12)

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EdKline

3:47AM | Thu, 17 June 2010

This is the end of chapter one. I'm thinking strongly about leaveing out the word baloons from now on. I think they detract from the artwork.

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jclP

6:37AM | Thu, 17 June 2010

well done

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Biffowitz

6:43AM | Thu, 17 June 2010

Experimenting is always good, there is no doubt that the artwork looks better on its own. You could try a couple of styles, one single full size like this, for climatic scenes. Perhaps the other a comic style page layout with multiple panels (for the story telling part) then the talk bubbles might work better for you.

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DangerousThing

7:14AM | Thu, 17 June 2010

I think the key to using talk balloons is to use fewer words and to leave places for the balloons in the artwork. The bottom part is great for But I love the organic nature of your art. I like the way the ship looks like a beached whale.

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thecytron

8:30AM | Thu, 17 June 2010

Xcellent composition! Stunning colors!

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AureliusdeMercoeur

9:30AM | Thu, 17 June 2010

Excellent scene ! I prefer see the pictures without the word balloons ! The word ballons are interesting only when the text is very important ! Most of time, they hurt the composition...

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