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The Morning Ocean

Writers Realism posted on Dec 09, 2010
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Somewhere recently I read someone make an analogy of playing music to surfing, and this is the image that came to mind. 6 a.m. - Saturday - The Ocean Jim paddles his board out across the morning ocean. The cool brisk air washes over him, but he doesn't mind one bit. Every moment out here is precious to him, as he finds that perfect spot out in the water. The weather is perfect today for waves, and soon Jim finds himself exactly where he wants to be. As he readies himself the thought never crosses his mind that any other day he would not be awake at this hour, especially on a weekend, this is perfect surf. The anticipation builds as the best wave builds up behind him, and at the perfect moment without a moment's thought to the occasion he pops up on his board and rides the wave towards the shore. He can feel the water carving against his board and into his feet, and he swings his board back and forth with the flow. He crashes hard into the water and everything is a blur for just a moment, but he comes to the surface, grabs his board, and paddles back out to do it all again. 6 a.m. - That Same Saturday - That Same Ocean James' aching muscles drag the paddles across the water, his little boat crashing into each wave. He can make a few bucks this weekend selling fish down at the market, but that's not where his mind is today. His mind is on the night before, and the argument he had with his wife because they were short on the rent again. His wages had been cut at the plant again, and there was talk of unions, which only meant a strike was coming somewhere down the road. He had worked late last night, and the last thing he wanted to do was to be out here on the water, but he knew of a little place where the fish liked to hide during weather like this. He shivered in the cold morning air, and the mist from the ocean wasn't making things any better. Cold like this was going to make the arthritis in his shoulder act up again, he just knew it. And sure enough it did. Out there on the water Jim and James met eyes for a moment, and just for that instant their minds traded places. ------- Image borrowed from beachzz photograph "Every Which Way" http://www.renderosity.com/mod/gallery/index.php?image_id=2143266&user_id=513196&member&np (hope you don't mind)

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TallPockets

3:10PM | Thu, 09 December 2010

This old man HOPES that NO other human EVER gets HIS mind. He wouldn't wish THAT on ANYONE. SMILES.

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beachzz

5:46PM | Thu, 09 December 2010

And they knew each other then. What a wonderful story; you captured both their feelings so well. And thanks for using my foto; it did work just right!!

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Mayalin

7:37PM | Thu, 09 December 2010

A touching story ... of different points of view ... and moments in time ...

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Chipka

4:51PM | Fri, 10 December 2010

I love the symmetry in this: Jim and James...nice touch. I also love the casual manner in which a rather spectacular event is conveyed; the best science fiction in the world does exactly this--it bridges a gap that most people don't even know is there, and it puts you (the reader) smack dab in the middle of a world you know nothing about; there are no familiar things and so you have to feel you way through it, and abandon every single preconception you depend on just to get through a moment, let alone an entire day. This isn't science fiction, however, but it does the same thing in such a short and concise space. I love the shifting viewpoints between James and Jim and the weird link in identity that they share, simply because--by their names alone--they are the same person. Maybe the same person in two literally different worlds. Maybe not. At any rate, they share an ocean and for just an instant, they share each other, without ever speaking a word. This is quite moving. Quite well done. And I had to laugh, quite loudly, at your use of beachzz' image. She has a way of capturing things that spark all sorts of stories. Way the heck back in my gallery there are a few pieces of hers serving as the visual references of fictional stories. I was in Prague when the first of her images grabbed me and actually INSPIRED parts of the rather long story written. I love it when art and artists do that; it's an unexpected illustration of what you've just written about here: two people on the same planet, but oceans and oceans away, sharing--if only for a moment--something that is important (or inspiring) to them both. This is really great. I'd love to see more of Jim and James too so see if they'll agree to be written.


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