Whew! That's a lot going on. I think initially, I would like to see Colt progress through the academy, everything doesn't have to be easy for him, he should struggle occasionally, but always come through a better person. The relationship between him and his deputies (Merits) should gradually grow stronger than any circumstance could alter. Colt's relationship with Toran should grow such that respect, love and sacrifice are unthinking responses. Colt should gradually come to realize how important Cora could be in his life, welcome this knowledge, and act on it. I will have more to offer, but this is enough for right now. Thanks for the opportunity. Rick

I refused to look. It would be like reading the end of the book before the beginning. Never could understand the logic in that. I find the idea of an Amphibian race fascinating. I'd like to know more about his upbringing, planet and race. Being a biologist, I wonder what offspring interspecies create. Are the offspring viable, are they able to reproduce when they reach maturity? In order for interspecies mating to work does there require genetic manipulation as you implied in a past episode? I could go on but feel you are the author these are issues need to resolve or not.

I'm not going to look at it close up, but it is making my head hurt to even attempt to wrap my head around all that. Excellent work!

Wow, that's very nice! I can relate to that approach, I love how you put together a good sense of the history for your story, and how you want it to progress. Very cool!

I look forward to all these events and then some Thanks

I think Cora is going to be around for a long time, would love to see your vision of her! Would also like to see some pets incorporated, even goldfish can be fun and a good learning tool for young people! Imagine a Demonian with a guppy and very little water! Just filler ideas, do not want to mess with the true creative flow that has to be totally from you, ultimately you are the magic here!

Gasp. Wow. Sharp intake of breath. and a much better grasp of how the stories all fit in time. I'm way overwhelmed by the scope .. and right now have nothing much to offer. But as I said before, I need to know where the characters take the story, not where we want them to take the story. Only you can decide on their fate .. but yeah, if something strikes me .. I will mention it.

Excellent!

Oh yeah ... this is totally helpful. Thanks for putting it together! I'd like to see a bit more backstory on Colt's four Merits, so we get a sense of who they are and how and why they'll react certain ways in certain circumstances. Like when Toran gets "shot" by a girl because he wouldn't shoot her first. Is it because he's a teenage boy? Because his race has a natural bias? Because he's unsure of the rules? What's important to him? What does he value? He has a good head for strategy. How did he get that way? How do Merits get chosen? What values and/or traits and/or backgrounds make a good Merit, and who gets grouped with who? Not all questions need to be answered, but these are some of the things I think about when nobody is looking. :P

Your outline gives a great timeline to all Your stories and how they fit and interlock together. Would like to read and learn more about the Gunslinger law enforcers. Awesome work!!

Fantastic !

I did have a peep!!!

A most amazing and wonderful body of work! Looks very nicely organized! A fantastic and fascinating universe you have created! Bravo!