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A million-I-don't-know years ago, Wolfenshire posted a list of story "starters" in the Writers Forum. I decided to try one out. Exercise my writing muscles a little. I am not a plot person. In my every day life I don't speculate much. I don't wonder what people are up to, mostly because I don't care one way or another. After much thought and discussion, I believe that trait is also what keeps me from being a novelist. If you give me a plot I can write the scenes, but "what happens next?" questions sort of bore me. On the other hand, I love to read! Before I got involved on Renderosity and started to spend all my time taking pictures and fiddling around on line, I read every night, and would go through four or five books a week. If there's another "on the other hand" though, I dislike movies and television. I like the richness of the plot of a book. So there you go! No movies, yes books, but either way, plots don't come to me.
This is the "starter" I chose. I've gone back to it many times, and even talked to Wolf about it, because he spouts full-on plots in his sleep, but this is as far as I got. I told Mark (anahata.c) about it, and he said, "Post it anyway! Let people see your unfinished work!" I think that's a terrific idea, because if I post it, I won't work on it any more, and I can let go of the idea that I'll ever do something with it. LOL!
This is what Wolf gave us:
Surely such things happen only in the movies. But here I was, lost in a foreign country, rain pouring down, lightening criss-crossing the sky ominously illuminating the flickering trees, and the only haven in sight - an ancient and foreboding castle.
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Here's my version:
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Surely such things happen only in movies, but here I was, lost in a foreign country in the pouring-down rain. Lightning crisscrossed the sky giving the trees an ominous, flickering quality that I would have appreciated as an artistic expression in another time and place, but wasn't crazy about at the moment. I trudged along the increasingly muddy road, cold rain running under my shirt collar and plastering the fabric to my skin. It was easier to keep my head down, only looking up from time to time to see if anything had changed. Between the lightning and the full moon, at least I could see where I was going. I made it a game after a while, counting one hundred steps and then looking up the road. Another hundred steps and another look. I don't know how far I went, but as I rounded a corner counting to myself, "Ninety-eight, ninety-nine, one hundred," I looked up and saw what must be the only haven for miles around --- an ancient and foreboding castle.
"Oh, for pity sake," I said aloud.
I sighed, and looked around carefully in the flickering light just to make sure there wasn't a warmly lit cottage somewhere nearby. It would be a shame to miss the possibility of a crackling fire and a hot meal just because I didn't have the sense to check my surroundings.
No such luck.
I'm not much of a movie buff, but even I knew the perils of approaching a lightning-lit castle at the top of a hill in the dark and the rain. Dawn was probably eight or ten hours away though, and it was cold and getting colder, so I thought I'd take my chances. Maybe there would be an outbuilding in which I could take refuge until the rain stopped.
The castle couldn't be more than half a mile away, and the idea of being warm and dry spurred me on.
Unfortunately that half mile was all uphill, but as I panted my way to the top I comforted myself with the fact that no bats were flying across the moon, no wolves were howling, and there was no creepy music coming mysteriously from an unknown source.
Eventually the mud and gravel surface of the road gave way to cracked macadam, for which I was grateful. It made the last bit of my climb easier, and lessened my feeling of foreboding. Anyone who paved their driveway probably didn't sleep in a coffin or play the french horn from the rooftops at night.
I approached the castle from the front, ignoring the huge double doors in favor of a few minutes of exploration. If I could find a warm place to dry off, maybe I wouldn't have to deal with the denizens of such a place.
The driveway circled what would have been a fountain if someone added water, and continued on to what I hoped might be a carriage house or a garage. If there were any outbuildings I couldn't see them from here, but if there was nobody around back in what I imagined would be the kitchen, I would strike off in search of other shelter. A path curved back around the far corner of the house, and I followed it as best I could.
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That's it! No matter how much I think about this, I can't care if my character finds someone in the kitchen, or goes to the carriage house. Maybe s/he ends up dead in the basement. Maybe s/he meets someone normal. Maybe there's nobody home.
In any event, I hope you enjoyed this little trip up the road and around the corner of a house. :P
Comments (9)
Faemike55
interesting trip, I must say! A spot of tea and maybe a biscuit in front of a medium-sized fire place, while the host rings for the maid to get you dry clothing, a warm bath and a place to lay your head for the night while the storm rages on. You sleep soundly and wake up the next morning refreshed and find your clothing clean and laid out. You dress quickly and go downstairs to the smells of breakfast cooking and best of all, coffee! the maid spots you and smiles cheerily and invites you to sit down and enjoy the coffee and that the master will be down shortly.
the master enters the room and asks how you slept and you reply that it was the best sleep in a long time. While the maid serves breakfast, the master inquires as to how you got to the manor and your destination....
npauling
Oh damn, now you have left me in limbo Tara. I like things to be rounded off so now you have managed to get me thinking of all sorts of endings to your tale. I should have stopped reading when I saw that it wasn't finished but of course I didn't and now well I'm not sure what to do. I hope someone else will finish Mikes addition as that has left me worse off..... Great work Tara even if it isn't finished.
wysiwig
Well of course there were no bats or wolves. Animals have enough sense to stay out of the rain. You write well which encourages the reader to turn the page although you might be channeling Snoopy. His stories always started with "It Was A Dark and Stormy Night".
auntietk
Yes, exactly my reason for the title. Good catch!
RodS
Suddenly she heard a noise like the grinding of far away gears. "I have a bad feeling about this," she said quietly to herself, not realizing that she had just used the most-often quoted movie phrase in the galaxy - since she never goes to movies, you know... Before she could react, the ground beneath her began to sink rapidly. Within a few moments she found herself surrounded by several scantily clad, but beautiful women, arms folded, feet tapping the floor. Weapons of every description hung from belts they were almost wearing. A balding figure sat across the room staring into several computer monitors and cackling maniacally to himself. "Dammit!" She exclaimed.... "I've stumbled right into the middle of one of those wacky T.N.A. pages! How the hell do I get outta here?"
Now, see how easy it is? Of course a warped mind and coffee - lots of coffee - helps a lot.
durleybeachbum
Amazing..and good old Rods!
helanker
You know what, Tara? Just ask Mark. He would say, this half done story is the same, as if you go into a Concert hall full of musicians and you go to the Piano and play DO-RE-MI-FA-SOL-LA-SI... and then you leave the hall. I did that just to make my collegues crazy in the music Publishing firm, I was educated in :) They were all musicians and couldnt go on with their life, before they had ended the line with the High key "DO". lol! And someone always went to the piano and did. lol.
You leave the same feeling by posting this beginning. Geee! I am now having this picture in my head and I will never really know what happened next. This never ended, though very well written story, made me also think about something from over 40 years ago. I will write a story about that and post it for you, Tara.
kgb224
Wonderful writing Tara. God bless.
T.Rex
Nice beginning. Then you fall through that trap door and into Rods Lair! Be careful not to step on Summer's toes. She's promised to be on her best behavior while a guest of the TNA, but..... frying pan! Thanks for the laugh. I understand your predicament. In junior high we had to write a short story. I couldn't even get started! And then it was over in less than 1 page. I don't remember what grade I got, but it was not a "F", but neither an "A". So, now you know how long it took me to learn creative writing (I took a course in college to get on with scientific writing). My big problem is inspiration. And may be yours, too. Keep up the good work. I like that dark, wet image! :-)
moochagoo
Damned I wanted to put there that snoopy picture