Kyna Page 011 - First Impressions by LyleAryn
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Dialogue here was hard, because I didn't want to give anything away just yet. Just like the last page. I was going to have a squarebox of something Kyna was thinking as she looked at the Princess, but I felt anything I wrote would spoil the tension I'm trying to build.
I know it's probably not the BEST, but I figure the more I practice, the better I'll get. It serves its purpose, so I'll go with it. After staring at this page for TWO DAYS!
Of course, now I got to figure out how to make an effect. Probably gotta be in GIMP. Hmm. (strokes beard.*
Onward to the next one! I want to get one last one done for the week, though I've already hit my goal of 4 pages. It won't always have that pacing, but since the primary goal is to learn new things, I'm pushing myself to work a little harder at this stage. After that, I'll have to figure out if I'm going to continue the story long-term. I don't really have an end-goal for the characters that works for something short-term. Kyna wants vengeance, and to pay a debt. What motivates the other characters? Well, I have some answers, but don't wish to spoil anything.
I did find two volumes of this comic called "Princeless: Raven the Pirate Princess" and I would like to mention it now. Found 'em at Goodwill. Don't have the first volume, but what I do have is really fun. Good story! So I thought I'd share the find since it isn't anything "mainstream."
Comments (11)
ikke.evc
Nicely done.
LyleAryn
Thanks, Ikke!
miwi
Excellent done, like it a lot!!!!!!!!!!!
LyleAryn
Thank you Mike!
Alias52
I love how the story is developing.
LyleAryn
Darkglass
Another great set of panels....your keeping things close to your chest...given very little away.....i'm intrigued...top work.!!
LyleAryn
Best to keep the exposition down. Which is sort of the opposite of writing a novel.
Tracesl
excellent
LyleAryn
Thanks!
starship64
Nicely done. You're right not to give too much away at first; just enough to keep the reader interested.
LyleAryn
Yes. Hopefully I'm doing that.
rbowen
Excellent work!
LyleAryn
Thanks a lot!
dakotajaroo
the story continues, fine
LyleAryn
Thank you for reading it!
Saby55
Beautiful composition on this image and fantastic story 👍🙋♂️
LyleAryn
Thank you, my friend. I appreciate it.
chasfh
Still working it I see...
The minimal dialogue allows the images to speak, so you find yourself looking for those visual clues, a facial expression or a particular stance. Just how all the best visual novels do it!
LyleAryn
Aww. Thank you. I'm looking forward to the next few pages - even if they're going to be difficult to pull off.
daggerwilldo
I love the interaction you are creating. Very fun and quite enjoyable.
LyleAryn
Thanks. They're quite the pair, so I look forward to how it progresses. It's weird doing comic dialogue, though.