NLA Morning Routine Comic by MajinBoo
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This was a challenge from last month from the Northern Lights Academy group on DeviantArt. Thankfully there was an extension because last month was pretty hectic for me, but I wanted to participate. All the characters are mine except for Delight and Br'eer Bunny who were created by USAUgirl on DeviantArt. All the art was done in Poser 13 and I put the panels and FX and speech balloons using the Comic Life 3 app. This is a follow up to having my character Princess joining the chess club at the Northern Lights Academy but having a little trouble since she tends over think her moves much to the chagrin of her fellow club members.
Comments (5)
Diemamker
Excellent work!
can't wait to see more!
MajinBoo
Glad you like it. I'll probably come back to this story. 😊
Tracesl
excellent
MajinBoo
Gratitude Tracesl.
MollyFootman
This is a cute little "slice of life" and had me giggling at points. I don't follow you that closely at DA so I'm glad I'm catching up with things and saw it here. Thanks for sharing, my dear! =)
Molly
MajinBoo
Thanks Molly, I appreciate you taking the time view and comment. To be honest most of what I post ends up here first anyway. I got some catching up to do on commenting myself.
mmitchell_houston
Very cute. I'll go back and look for earlier episodes so I can get a better idea of what's happening. Your frame sizes and storytelling flow well; I can always tell who is speaking and what's happening. I'm particularly impressed with your continuity; as I said, the scenes flow well. If I were to offer one bit of advice in regards to your framing, it would be to add more variation to your character sizes. In other words, add some close-ups now and then. For instance, in the panel where she smashes the clock, it would be more powerful if you zoomed in and brought us right up to her fist smashing down. We would get a better sense of the impact and her strength that way. I would also suggest you be a little more mindful of your balloon placement. For example, on the second page at the top, you're covering part of the face of the guy in the red hoodie. Moving the guy would be the best option, but if that would have been too much work you could have shifted the balloon a little bit to make it either completely cover his face or not at all. Finally, your captions are well written, but almost all of your caption boxes are too big with extra space wasted at the bottom. Just trim 'em down to let us see more of your great scenes.
One thing worth mentioning is your good use of a color story. Home life is dominated by light, soft colors which help convey the homey, comforting feel of home life. These are contrasted nicely by the darker, more serious tones of the world outside the home. VERY smart work in this regard.
Wow. I hope I didn't come of as being negative. I really enjoyed what I saw here and I can tell you put a lot of hard work into it and it really pays off. Thank you SO MUCH for sharing this with us. WELL DONE.
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MajinBoo
First off thank you so much for taking the time to look over these pages. You made some great points. I like the idea of the fist zoomed in on her smashing the clock. Still working on my balloon placement. The Comic App I use to put the images in comic form is helpful and I could definitely manage the positioning with the word balloons and caption boxes in the ways you mentioned. I appreciate the constructive criticism. Not only did you express how much like them, but you gave me some great tips to help me improve future comic pages.