Poems96/98 (3): "A Closed Sky" by gallimel
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*Sky's closed,
it won't open for my day.
I feel like everyone's just ready
to joke me,
to hurt me,
to laugh at what I am,
to dismiss what I could be.
The flowers never grow here
the birds can't sing my songs...
I am the mud.
Still I don't wanna believe
that there's not a piece of sky
which could open for me,
to let the sun
caress my face,
so pale,
too pale,
while all I'd like
is to be taken,
kissed by the sun,
kissed by sweet lips,
kissed by that care
I'm not gonna give up
to finally meet.
But sky's closed
and I am the mud.
I hear the laughes,
I hear the jokes...
Too many faces, too many forces:
you've dried my hopes
like devil's morphings:
takin one sweet glimpse of eyes
into dreadful offsets,
you're one,
you're hundreds,
you make my sky get doomed,
you make my flowers looming.
I hear the jokes,
they make me cry...
When's gonna happen that I'll get those smiles
to clear my dark sky
that hides sun's rayes?*
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Photoshop. Frome these sources.
Thanx tattoedravengirl for givin me inspiration for the illustration of this poem.
One hour and half work.
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The third piece of my series dedicated at illustrating my old poems written by 1996/1998. Again this is not meant to be a portrait, just a photoshop excercise.
I wanted to give a framed, static expression to an doubting, turning into depression state of mind, still with certain colours to underline a no better defined hope still present in the frame, although very gloomed down by the unacceptance of the positivity of the self ...
I also wanted to compose it in a bit of urban, graffiti-like touches,suggestin a sort of negative psychedelia turning into decorative fixicity.Basically the denying of the youth vitalism, through young codes.
The mood is again low one. Which was common bread by my 19 (but luckely not anymore.. that's why I keep posting this series: look how negative I was, and imagine if I could findhappines back, evryone can :)) ;)
So once more..."Enjoy" :)
Comments (100)
gunsan
Meli, here you have outdone yourself in this series I totally love it, Image and poem fitting so tight together, colors right, typography too IMH.
catmandennis
Melania, encellent! I am so pleased to see more of your work. You just get better all the time. The poem is beautiful and the picture matches it perfectly.
jstsittinghere
very moving emotional words Meli! heartfelt! beautiful work
DJB
Well here's a smile. It is a really nice work of graphics.With truly a good poem.
logiloglu
a fascinating poem and a wonderful illustrative collage. expressive and dynamic work. v !!!!!!! #:O) !!!!!!!!
Shadane
wow: i love the interaction of the colours, words, and the images. well done this is stunning
cynlee
i really like the poster quality of this... well chosen color & type... expressive, searching of self poem... through the mud a rose has blossomed :]
twisted_angel_9
Was someone on drugs when they opened photoshop? :P JK! Great job!
DawnStar
I love your poems. And you always manage to illustrate them so clearly. :)
SophiaDeer
A very beautiful and heartfelt poem, Meli! Your artwork is as creative as you are beautiful young lady!
adm5050
A beutiful poem and a wonderful image. Your insight an openness is still a wonder to me.
titta
I don't see either the poem or the picture so all negative. There is hope - the mind can't be captured:-)The poster kind expression shows variaty of those nasty notices of other people's behaviour. And inbetween there is light and hope, and some self-confidence too. The sky is open in the picture! The picture supports the poem - and vice versa. --- Brilliant work here, Meli.Love this style! ---Only one notice: typography pleases my eye, except the effect on the "I need smile":-) Let's smile:-)
GreenSat
I'm glad you're not feeling this way anymore...this is somewhat depressing. Technically your image is well crafted after the poem, however, it also has little hints of your more current moods in the little sparks of bright color that show you're not as negative as the poem might imply. Interesting...
Snow_Angel
Meli once again you have captured our hearts. This image and your poem really identifies with humanity. Your depth of realisation is so remarkable. A real gift from God! V :)
vjerana
Very emotional...but I must say, I am happy knowing that is all about past! Excellent poem and picture!V!
Corven
Cool color-combination. You've given the sources your own style, which makes it looking great. Corven
coolj001
This is a very good work as always...like the whole universe is/was working against you(or maybe both ways) I can relate, and am happy this is past tense for you. :-)
Varian
I am glad the sky had opened to your day and the birds once again know your songs. Good use of "the mud" repetition in this image. The purple, violet, blue and aqua are innately festive to my eyes, yet you have managed to make them awkward and confused here - well done.
vlaaitje
beautiful words.......love it because I am a poet too....and I like the expression in this art, I hope your visitors visit my poetry website My tree of life
abmlober
I know this kind of poems happens when you are in the right mood for them, "when the heart is full of emotions and forces the mind to let them flow out as words"... To accompany words spoken long ago seems very difficult for me...
Mercytoo
Very moving piece and poem. I certainly can relate. Beautiful work!
Meyrink
Un manifesto illustrato con bravura!!!
bern
I hope you are in a better mood now :) Nice work !
kenwas
Quite strong.
vod
excellent
RodolfoCiminelli
Le parole del poema hanno un'eccellente illustrazione nelle immagini che tuo creasti....!!! ha un aspetto grafico molto bello che ha una ridotta e forte gamma di toni...!!
crrunchyfrog
I adore your poems my angel, and this one is no exception, you always manage to grab my attention, feeling as if you have written solely for me L That is a gift. The image that accompanies it suits the feelings portrayed so well and I feel as if its on a horrid subway train, graffiti making it all the more claustrophobic. Thank you so much for sharing this Meli HUGS
Evchen76
When I see a so fantastic work from you...so I dont need a smile..your work make my smile!! FANTASTIC in all the way! Hey have a fantastic weekend my sweet! Kiss Eva
Gregor.Scharff
you touch us with your art like a breath of a angel . Thanks that you do it . Galaxy-Hugs your Gregor
eres
Yes fantastic artwork and poem Meli!