Poems96/98 (3): "A Closed Sky" by gallimel

2D • Alternative • posted on Feb 27, 2004

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*Sky's closed, it won't open for my day. I feel like everyone's just ready to joke me, to hurt me, to laugh at what I am, to dismiss what I could be. The flowers never grow here the birds can't sing my songs... I am the mud. Still I don't wanna believe that there's not a piece of sky which could open for me, to let the sun caress my face, so pale, too pale, while all I'd like is to be taken, kissed by the sun, kissed by sweet lips, kissed by that care I'm not gonna give up to finally meet. But sky's closed and I am the mud. I hear the laughes, I hear the jokes... Too many faces, too many forces: you've dried my hopes like devil's morphings: takin one sweet glimpse of eyes into dreadful offsets, you're one, you're hundreds, you make my sky get doomed, you make my flowers looming. I hear the jokes, they make me cry... When's gonna happen that I'll get those smiles to clear my dark sky that hides sun's rayes?* ------------------------- Photoshop. Frome these sources. Thanx tattoedravengirl for givin me inspiration for the illustration of this poem. One hour and half work. ------------------------ The third piece of my series dedicated at illustrating my old poems written by 1996/1998. Again this is not meant to be a portrait, just a photoshop excercise. I wanted to give a framed, static expression to an doubting, turning into depression state of mind, still with certain colours to underline a no better defined hope still present in the frame, although very gloomed down by the unacceptance of the positivity of the self ... I also wanted to compose it in a bit of urban, graffiti-like touches,suggestin a sort of negative psychedelia turning into decorative fixicity.Basically the denying of the youth vitalism, through young codes. The mood is again low one. Which was common bread by my 19 (but luckely not anymore.. that's why I keep posting this series: look how negative I was, and imagine if I could findhappines back, evryone can :)) ;) So once more..."Enjoy" :)

Comments (100)

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KingPtolemy

6:35AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

Very interesting composition!!! A virtual poetry!!!

Heart'Song

6:39AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

I think you have done a lovely job of catching the turbulent angst of youth. It is so harsh and raw

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Bothellite

6:41AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

Beautiful job of expression. And you survived and create beauty for all of us.

linkinpark

7:23AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

Wonderful job on expression, great contrast!

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SNAKEY

7:38AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

Here is a big smile for your meli....:O)) Beautiful expression.:O)

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leda_moon

7:48AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

Very touching words it hits a place in my heart as well.Very nice work!!

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tibet2004uk

7:52AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

Pretty depressive indeed my sweet Meli!! I was the same at that age!! I used to wrote poems too and very depressive and dark ones too!! I can really relate to this! :) All my love sweety-pie! :)

wildfire2003

8:09AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

Wonderful poem, I recall how everything was so very emotional at that age. Thank goodness we grow out of that!! Words and image blend together beautifully, Meli, well done!

Rogue9

8:15AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

Very, very nice work, and an excellent poem. I love the purple and blue you have used. amazing

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jwdell

8:33AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

Excellent composition, fantastic presentation! you are truly amazing...

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figharo

9:32AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

A mood I don't often see coming from you. I like the graphic elements and the text as graphic tretment very much.

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j-art

9:37AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

uh - wow - your poem is really touching - very strong - i love the way how you illustrated it - hmmmm, i think i can remember you said once, you are not an artist? - oh meli, you are, you are for sure an artist, with many many different talents - my hats up to you!!!!!!!!!

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i-popba

9:42AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

Excellent color and composition , Meli,........love it !!!!!!

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estevez

9:53AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

Really a very expressive artwork. A very harmonious composition with a beautiful artistic concept. "my vote" Congratulations Meli !

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Elfenone

10:16AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

OH beautiful! Your poem and image are wonderful. Your poem reminds me of how I felt when I had to go to my gloomy office where I wasn't appreciated. I never thought the sun shone over that place ..to me the sun never did shine until I got home and could see my sweet husband. Beautiful Meli hon. HUGS

zoku01

10:21AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

I can feel the emotions coming off the screen in this piece. The image and words go together perfectly and fit the mood. The way you express yourself thrugh poetry and artwork is like therapy; it has been good for you. Wonderful artwork!

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lemonjim

10:32AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

those bastards! they switched off the sun, and closed the sky? very moving image and poem, i know how you feel...

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FearaJinx

10:32AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

I like the colors you choose and the beautiful job you did! Wonderful work!

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DennisReed

10:43AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

Awesome image to support a superb poem, sad but with a ray of conviction that there is still some hope! Bravo, Meli!

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B_PEACOCK

11:23AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

Very excellent image and poem . Excellent work as always .Big Hug }}}}}}}}}

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danob

11:27AM | Fri, 27 February 2004

You share so much with us your frienship your beauty, and your art thanks sweetheart!! Hugz xx

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Beemer

1:06PM | Fri, 27 February 2004

.............Got any room for me to squeeze in here... Great job Meli!... :)

JACE1020

1:29PM | Fri, 27 February 2004

isn't julia the best gal? awesome work there. love it.

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redbeard

4:27PM | Fri, 27 February 2004

Great poem and image to go with it. Isn't it interesting looking back on life. I wish I could remember when I was 19! Excellent work all around, a very emotional experience.

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Zargent

4:31PM | Fri, 27 February 2004

Lovely poem and art !

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borsy

4:33PM | Fri, 27 February 2004

Excellent artwork and poem, Meli!!!

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PumaSue

5:07PM | Fri, 27 February 2004

I am glad to see she is outside. Some of the less fortunate are trapped inside and don't even know if the sky is open or not, or if it even exists anymore. The character in your beautiful render has ventured out and sees that there is a sky, even if she doubts it's open-ness to her. She looks cautiously wide-eyed and unsure of what she sees and hears. Yet I see a strength in her expression, even if she wonders if she is mud. This is a beautiful image you have created. I think the colors you chose are perfect for her mood. I love your poem even if it sad and reveals to us the deep pain you once held. Thank you again for sharing of yourself to us. I am very happy that you have passed the negativeness and found happiness, Meli. Big Hug & Smile

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