Beautiful poem and nice collage! Sorry for what is happening...be strong!

Thank you Lary I really much appreciate that. I had I nightmare this night: I had to put her on a ship - which she thought will enable her to make career - with lots of crookedly looking fellows. There was no way for me to stay on ship. I had to leave her there :/

A poem of intimate beauty! I'm sorry for you, missing her so much. Just as you say, leaving her on that ship, to trust her out your hands, and watching the ship leaving, leaving you alone with your scars. Very impressive presentation! Take care!

suggestions? keep writing and keep taking doing beautiful artwork! you are a gifted expressionalist! your poem is gut-wrenching, achingly beautiful though full of sorrow. but you have that spark of hope, so don't lose it! the collage is just as poignant and touching! Keep the faith. This world is full of love for you!

I makes me realy glad to share this with you people. Thank you for your comments. Today is my birthday ^^ well I don't think I will celebrate I have no reason.

be strong dear.. the poem is filled with soul and heart.. and I really share all you're passing through. Believe me sun will shine back. Be strong. Meli xxx

I agree with gallimel ... it is a heartfelt poem chock-full of emotion. Technically, I would break it up into the three sections you've indicated ... and make it clear that the break is deliberate by numbering I , II , III or giving a separate title to each section. I would also also put "- places that spend warmth and shelter" on a different line so that it echoes the line break with "- a picture of the past -". That should give it a certain elegance of structure. The collage is good, though it could be improved if you use the 'soften edge' function a little more on the cutouts. Although this comment might seem critical ... actually I'm more a little impressed - so don't be discouraged, be angry if you like ... better still be inspired. It will be worth it.