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You were the prettiest poem
You were my strength of life
You were the greatest song
You were the dreams inside
You were my spark of hope
The brightness in my eyes
You were my lesson to grow
You were the tear I cried
You were the one I loved
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Comments (5)
meico
A pretty little love poem ... the simplicity of expression works very well to make an effective and moving piece.
netsia
I understand the force behind this. I like this, sometimes we just have to write about them. I hope for you that thirty years from now, you will remember your love with as much warmth as I remember mine. They never go away, I have always said that when I pass he will be there helping me to cross, his hand outstretched for mine. Thank you for your kind words on my posting. :)
cagewench
I liked it. I've got 2 suggestions though, edit it to fix the typo in "strength" and then I would consider doing something different with the line "You were the bright in my eyes" I'd suggest saying "brightness" ot "light" rather than bright. Good work.
Rudinside
Perfeito... t lindinho esse poema mo... mas tristezinho tambem... se eu souber que vocestchorando por ele, vou lno c puxar a orelha dele! rs rs... beijinhos paixao! rs
Blush
Nicely written poem Also nice to meet you I just posted a new poem too hopoing you come see me also:) Vote Hugs Susan~