Surrender Serenity by Blush

Writers • Atmosphere/Mood • posted on Oct 18, 2004

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Do you hear the water whispering? It's voice soft, sensuous, beckoning seductively Surrender... Enchanted I concede Stalked by unbridled Desire... Entangled in icy grips as it surreptitiously draws My gaze into its soul Exotic shades of terror and Exhilaration... As the water writhes in bittersweet agony Externally haunted By ghosts of the undead Passion... The salty tribute of my heart Caress the liquid angst, As I succumb To tast the unforbidden Ecstasy Suddenly my essence takes flight Searching for a mystic paradise Known only as Serenity~ Didn't know quite what category to put this one in Thanks for all the comments on my last posts As always your views and comments are appreciated:)

Comments (23)

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romanceworks

9:55PM | Mon, 18 October 2004

A very sensual way to serenity, indeed. Gorgeous and lush writing. :o) CC

RobertTheoret

10:37PM | Mon, 18 October 2004

Very moving words, Excellently written and expressed. Well done my friend. BRAVOS!!!

cynlee

10:43PM | Mon, 18 October 2004

sounds like a dip in the sea... beautifully written :]

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Sekadhar

11:39PM | Mon, 18 October 2004

He, he..."romantic" category! Wonderful, my dear Susan! I love your poem! Excellent:))!!!

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BlueLotus7

11:56PM | Mon, 18 October 2004

Well, at last I've met someone else who gains serenity/peace through sensuality/erotica and not necessarily through sexual contact! Brilliant!

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brycek

12:09AM | Tue, 19 October 2004

Beautiful and romantic words..Marvelous poem!!

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awadissk

1:42AM | Tue, 19 October 2004

WOW! what a nice words I wish I could write such beautiful words like you, wonderful work Susan!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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sadlers5

7:35AM | Tue, 19 October 2004

could be one for titanic , cool poem, nope hubby lived to see another day hehe cuz red sox were on last nite! david ortiz is my man! :)

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cagewench

8:12AM | Tue, 19 October 2004

I absolutely love this line: "Exotic shades of terror and Exhilaration..."

captainparsa

10:18AM | Tue, 19 October 2004

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TallPockets

10:49AM | Tue, 19 October 2004

Most guys think foreplay is a golf foursome. WINK. You write wonderful stuff. V o t e.

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Elfenone

2:10PM | Tue, 19 October 2004

Well, my dear I think you picked the perfect catagory for this one, because you set an excellent atmosphere for serenity, and where better to find it but inside the soothing thoughts of liquidity.

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Hyria

8:23PM | Tue, 19 October 2004

nice wording and imagery :)

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ObsidianLogic

8:24PM | Tue, 19 October 2004

wonderful so feeling

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DennisReed

11:55PM | Tue, 19 October 2004

Lovely flow of words Susan! Bravo!

tvernuccio

4:38PM | Wed, 20 October 2004

such beautiful lyrics!!! i surrender to serenity. thank you! vote!

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madame

7:24AM | Thu, 21 October 2004

Very romantic and sensual words, Susan ! I really love the way you write all your poems... you are a very talented writer !!

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Lucidius

11:38AM | Thu, 21 October 2004

"Suddenly my essence takes flight, serching for a mystic paradise, known only as serenity." A powerfully emotional ending to a beautiful peace. I very much look forward to more of your work :)

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avalonfaayre

7:27PM | Thu, 21 October 2004

Wow. This kind of reminds me of someone walking into the sea to drown. That would be a kind of serenity, wouldn't it... lonely and peaceful at the same time. It almost wraps around me.

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davidoblad

7:40PM | Thu, 21 October 2004

Ha,ha,ha,ha.. Sorry, not laughing at you.. but at avalonfaayre above. I was thinking the same thing while reading your poem, kinda sad and suicidal. Fine line between serenity and despair sometimes. I won't need a shower for this one, in fact, now I'm afraid of the water.. hehe. Really excellent poem Susan!!! Especially your last line! Love it! Just love it!!!! Dave :^)

sanity21

5:19AM | Fri, 22 October 2004

Very nice, it does have a very serene mood, 'suddenly my essence takes flight' does indeed suggest as others have stated a finality of some sort, but it is a very calming piece, thanks for sharing

SerenityBlue

5:19PM | Sat, 23 October 2004

Very very nice, and you have such a way to make your words so very touching. :o) Have a beautiful day.

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findme1999

11:00PM | Wed, 03 November 2004

very nice, sounds like one of thos ethigns that is just so beautiful you can' tbear to lok at it all the time afraid it won't be beautiful to you anymore, but at the same time it's so beautiful you can't keep from staring and admiring, like frozen in place with an inability to do anything but exist in the moment, sincerely captivating