Time to Burn by digitalgrey
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I uploaded a friend's before... Now I'm being brave. This one,s mine!
Without hope, comes the morning.
This will be our final day
You have passed your final warning.
Yes I think that's what I'll say.
I found your black book of addresses.
They're your clients I am told.
As they pay for your caresses.
I'm the one who's feeling sold.
Hurry and come to the place we live.
It's not home, there's battle lines.
I have a speech prepared to give.
Something I should have said many times.
Cue the lights, drama and performance art.
You are angry, I'm being sarcastic.
Flow the poison from your heart.
Like everything in life it's just plastic.
Tears are flowing voices are screaming.
Oh yes indeed its drama time.
The door slams, what was I dreaming?
Now you are no longer mine.
Then I'm sitting alone in the darkness.
Now I stand against the wall.
Then I curse you call you heartless.
Now your name I softly call.
Comments (6)
AusPoet
Is this based in truth? If so, I'm sorry you had to go through such an experience. Beautiful expression of something clearly difficult and painful... and all those mixed feelings are well described, too. Great rhythm and rhyme as well! V O T E
cagewench
fav line: "Flow the poison from your heart. Like everything in life it's just plastic." When I read this aloud, there's a pull on the flow of this piece in a few places... "They're your clients", "It's not home there's battlelines" (though it ought to be "there are") & "the door slams, what was I dreaming" I 'd suggest adding "shut" to that line to help the flow a lil. All in all, well done :)
netsia
"Now your name I softly call." The most heartbreaking part of all. Very good!
seduction
Wonderfully written. You took me back to a place I've been before, and it feels like it was yesterday.
gallimel
It's really something that I can relate too as well.
TallPockets
Thanks for being 'brave'. Superb artwork above. Unfortunately, you write of circumstances too often experienced by many. Just a wonderful, descriptive and emotional filled piece. Big V O T E.