BIOI am an amature writer at best. I started writing on my thirteenth birthday out of sheer pubescent emotion and I found that it was a good way to understand how I felt, so I've been writing ever since. I'm now nineteen. I have won several contests through the years, but nothing serious, although I do hope to publish a book at one point or another. My work is quite.. angsty, I suppose. Teenage angst is a very powerful thing. I am finding however that as I get older my work becomes less about me and more about the world and people I come into contact with. I am very analytical of human behaviour and it makes for good writing.. but you can be the judge of that.
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Comments (5)
cardiacxarrest
I'm quite proud of this piece myself, but that is probably because after months of not wanting to talk about that night, this is what I came up with. However, I do feel that the "am" in the second line doesn't flow with the rest of the poem. I'm thinking of rephrasing the line altogether, but I'd like some feedback before I touch it. Comments/suggestions on that would be appreciated. Thanks guys!
susanmoses
You may be right about the second line... but I don't know how to direct you just now... I will say... though... that you've captured something... the essence of which moved me deeply... :)
TallPockets
I thought the 'am' was meant to be ''a.m.'' as in 'time'. You broke my old heart as I read this. I have five dear sisters and a few dear nieces. I cannot write here what I would do to such a 'friend' if they did similar to my loved ones above. Excellent written work. My apologies on behalf of 'good' guys.
cardiacxarrest
It was meant to be a.m. (my apologies for any confusion), but I still feel that it takes something away from the flow of the poem. Thank you both for your kind words and for your rankings.
cagewench
you could leave out the a.m. all together... jsut "at 1:47 you told me you wanted to kill yourself". Good for you for being able to write about it!