I can't by Meezan
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By Meezan.
I want something to believe, I can't
I want some room to breathe, I can't
This world is full of sleep walkers
They spend there lives asleep, I can't
The fear of loss is deep in me
It�s making me so full of hate
This lack of faith is eating me
I want to stop and breath, I can't
They blame me of being so selfish
They say I can't see beyond me
And temp me with their lifeless bliss
They see salvage in it, I can't
I think I better stop thinking
And see where moving tides take me
And maybe I would stop sinking
I cannot do that right, I can't
Comments (5)
Shadowmonkey
I was always told that there is no such word as can't ;0) I always find poems like this to be very claustrophobic. An excellent post :0)
FireTemptress
I think this poem may feel claustophoic, because the author feels that way. Trapped, in a world they can't control, dictated by others... and in the end, giving up, to allow life to just take them at will. This is not hope, this is giving up. All I can say, is break free.... whatever you have to do, break free...
NothingNess
I agree with FireTempress. Yes do break free, life is short don't let it pass you by and someday to say "I wish I had". You express yourself very well, keep giving voice to your feelings and thoughts, I know you'll find your way.
OriginalPIMP
Meezan, I'm not sure that your poem has been looked at right by the others. First: L O V E it! Second: It's their, not there. It sounds like the person, you or someone else, is in a hard place, but even though the easy was out is to accept life like everynoe else does - you don't. Also, the last stanza is like saying, maybe instead of standing still or choosing a specific action, you'll let life move you, since you've resisted any 'change' or movement of your own. Maybe a 'It's time to act instead of talk or think? kind of poem? Everybody knows quicksand pulls you down, most people don't know that fighting is worse, it's only when you're still that you can get out.
micsteel
Well, if your religious faith is what you're referring to, see the first chapter of James, and pray for wisdom and knowledge: Is what I've been told, true? While praying, read the first couple of chapters of Genesis, and ask "who is the liar here? The 'prince of lies?'" If that doesn't help you to learn where to seek wisdom, ask about Joshua in Jericho, Elija and the 450 prophets of Baal, Samson (what was he doing with Delilah, anyway?)... Checking Genesis One again, in the original, the "gods" (elohim) created. In Genesis Two, Yahweh God created. So who did Cain marry? In truth, the true creator cannot be contained by human scripture, but you can find the path: "Lean not on human understanding." Until you develop a PERSONAL relationship with the Creator, all the Bible-thumping in the world won't save you from sin.