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Subject: WIP "Windmill" ... C&C please?


eelie ( ) posted Mon, 19 April 2004 at 7:33 AM · edited Mon, 25 November 2024 at 11:41 PM

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Would you all be kind enough to criqitue this for me? I'm nearly done and it's down to things that will make it a really *good* picture and I'm pitiful at seeing that in my own work. As it is now---the bottom third or so hasn't been AA'd yet and there's a chunk of the small, dark tree on the right that hasn't been also. (This is taking forever to render.) A couple of questions I have are: is that same tree too dark? I'm using a photo texture on it and have lightened it as much as I can but it's still very dark, nearly too much for my taste. The other trees have Bryce texturing and I like them better really. Also, does the fence post and wire add anything or detract from the whole scene? I like it, but I'm just not sure. I'm planning on adding another flowering plant of some sort, probably in yellow. I'm going to try to model one so I can have it leaning in from the left side, showing against the sky. I'll probably put a few smaller ones in the grassy area just to keep the color going. Other than these things, does this need anything added or subtracted?


Sambucus ( ) posted Mon, 19 April 2004 at 7:46 AM

IMHO, the small tree doesnt do much for the pic but it doesnt detract from it, either. I think the shade is about right. The trees on the right are just perfect. I love putting old fence posts in images, I would certainly leave this in. A few more differntly coloured flowers would look good. I think this pic is going to look its best without being too fussy so I wouldnt look to add many more elements. It has a great composition.


Jaymonjay ( ) posted Mon, 19 April 2004 at 8:02 AM

Love the POV, and I agree with Sambucus about the trees: perfect. The only thing I'd work on is the sky; it seems a little flat, and I think some wispy clouds would do wonders for this. :)


TheBryster ( ) posted Mon, 19 April 2004 at 8:11 AM
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Nothing wrong with this. The POV is great, but perhaps the sky needs work?

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gregsin ( ) posted Mon, 19 April 2004 at 8:25 AM

Looks Great, don't know that I'd do anything to it, changing the sky might change the mood. It depends on what you want. POV is great.


electroglyph ( ) posted Mon, 19 April 2004 at 8:29 AM

A big Vane (Tail) out the back to keep the mill always pointed into the wind. Maybe a bird or two so keep the sky from looking so open. It's still better than anything I've ever done!


bazze ( ) posted Mon, 19 April 2004 at 9:36 AM

It's a good start but try adding more life to it: birds, bugs, bees, butterflies. There is something wrong with the horizon, you can see where the sky meets the blue ground (no ground). I'm not sure but is there a piece of wood in the middle of the image with barb wire around it? I suppose that the mill should look old so I would suggest adding details like things hanging down from it and making the wooden pieces a bit askew.

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eelie ( ) posted Mon, 19 April 2004 at 10:03 AM

Thanks all! I'm going to try to leave the sky as it is since I'm aiming for that midwest prairie, cloudless sky look. I thought about a bird or two but wasn't sure if I liked that look or not. Won't hurt to try tho! :o) There is a tail vane on this, it's just not visible because of the direction the windmill is facing. I played with the angle of the top part (whatever it's call) trying to get the tail more into the picture, but I didn't like the rest of it as well then. I may tweak that abit more and see if I can't find a compromise. @bazze...yup, that's an old fence post with barbed wire. :o) I'm not really going for a really old windmill, so I just used a weathered wood texture...it's not quite falling apart yet. I just modeled it! ;o) I like the idea of bugs. I've been wanting to do something with butterflies...maybe this is the one! :o) Thanks for the feedback everyone! I really appreciate it. Susan


tjohn ( ) posted Mon, 19 April 2004 at 11:54 AM

Susan: If it is possible, rotate some of the flowers so that they don't all seem to be at the same (or similar) angle. Flowers growing like this should be facing in all directions; and I agree that the tail of the windmill should be visible. Otherwise, I love the feel and character of this. John

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sackrat ( ) posted Mon, 19 April 2004 at 1:16 PM

This is going to be really nice,.....like others have said, a flock of birds maybe, also some insects and if you have Poser and the songbirds pak, how about a close-up bird going after insects ?

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rickymaveety ( ) posted Mon, 19 April 2004 at 2:02 PM

Yeah, I noticed the vane was missing too. You definitely need to add one.

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TheBryster ( ) posted Mon, 19 April 2004 at 7:34 PM
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TJohn: I thought flowers generally faced the sun?

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Blog ( ) posted Mon, 19 April 2004 at 9:05 PM

Don't have time to read the other posts so sorry if this is no longer an issue but KEEP THE DARKER TREE! It really helps the overall composition and depth. I think it would hurt the image to remove it if it is not atleast replaced with something similar.


Swade ( ) posted Mon, 19 April 2004 at 11:05 PM

Well Eelie... I live in the midwest praire... South Dakota, and your sky certainly does have that midwest prarie look to it. I do like the idea of a few birds maybe and a bug or 2. This has great potential. Very good so far. emoticons

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antioch ( ) posted Wed, 21 April 2004 at 7:48 AM

Looks really good. The only suggestion I can think of is a slight radial/motion blur on the windmill vanes to give a sense of wind.


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