Hey all, I'm just posting an image of mine I'm doing for a client who is putting in rock levees to stop the destruction of their beach. This image is not completed yet. It's a WIP (which is why it's not in the gallery) but I'm looking for comments and crits from fellow Vue'ers. It's a panorama btw. Thanks in advance.

The beach, water and shoreline are very convincing. The atmosphere is a little too artificial, especially the sky. Too busy in my opinion. Did you try with a quieter sky ?

No, I haven't yet. I'm basically giving it this weekend to compile a list of whats wrong in the image and will fix it on Monday morning. So far I've had the following comments: 1. The relief is too sudden (which I dont necessarily see as a big problem) 2. One person didn't like the sand...said it looked like concrete. My personal feelings: I personally dont think the island on the left has good texture and could stand to have more realistic leaves on my coconut trees throughout the ecosystem, but I'll have to find some bitmaps hopefully to alleviate this. I also may change the rock levees to have a bitmapped texture of stone instead of the procudural colors. It also needs a sense of scale...people somewhere...maybe in the water? Thanks for the comments.

I think the island on the left might look better if the landscape texture changed subtly towards the water's edge. It doesn't have to be sand, but something different than grass. I personally think the rock levees look great. and so does the sand.

Not much wrong to me.
Human for scale would be good - i'd place them on the levee, so its distance and size are scaled.

I agree sky is "busy" - why not plain dark blue (no clouds). Why let it distract at all?

Maybe foreground sand could have more yellow? It is a concrete color now, tho not texture.

Left island just needs more variety, i think - maybe add some rock outcrops among the grass?

Nice work! Maybe the light could be from a lower point, for more/longer shadows and better reading of the forms?

Message edited on: 09/10/2005 17:19

atmos is a to dense with detail, how about saturated light. the land mid on the left, too green wheres the beach...instead show an example of what erosion can really do to a beach, rocky outcrop tree just barely anchored to a sunfaded edge. Carabean islands are 70 million years old the island in the back looks to precise, or is it a volcanic island.

I'd definately agree with the comments on the sand, it's too grey for tropical beach sand (where the primary component is coral, not rock) As well as the comment about the left island starting straight at grass, you might try the lava rock and take off the lava portion of the material and set it at the lower elevation. The sky definately needs to be less cloudy, probably closer to a sky blue than a true blue. Other than that it looks really good, I like the water in particular. Hope this helps!

Excellent CC's guys. Next time you see this image, it'll be changed to reflect some of what you guys said. * lookin' forward to putting in more work *

Looks good Ryan...the one thing that stood out for me, is that the horizon line looks too central for my eyes. Maybe have the horizon line running along the top third of the image.
Hope that helps,
Cheers

Message edited on: 09/11/2005 05:54

Agree to most things already said. Just wanted to add something that I'm not sure about how it looks in reality, but which makes me wonder a little - especially because the rock levee's are the central subject of the image: I would imagine them to have some kind of influence on the water's surface... maybe only some disturbance, but maybe even s hint of foam? As they are there to protect the beach, I guess they should also in calm waters have at least some noticeable effect. But as I said, I don't know how they actually look - you might know better :-)

Here's a newer version of the image.